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My Poison
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My Poison |
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Shortysdadd Junior Member
since 2011-06-26
Posts 39 |
It rolls in The scent of dry poison Carried on the sun scalded air Reeking of almonds and feet Sifting through my tortured mind Like Scales against splintered boards Coughing up dust and kerosene I saw you long ago Yellowed paper in a dream You had teeth then Dancing on poles for scraps Majestic squalor in a filthy skirt All spun up on a deceitful whisper Hopelessly Pandering for Safety In someones shattered arms Never knowing you are Priceless to me My sweet bitter poison |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
"Dancing on poles for scraps Majestic squalor in a filthy skirt" Talk about words which jump out and envelope you, that is what the poem entry did for me. Excellent! ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wow! Just loved this - all of it equally. Wish I had written it... j. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Wow! You paint a powerful picture. Impressive! ~L |
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Shortysdadd Junior Member
since 2011-06-26
Posts 39 |
Thank you so much |
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Poet In Pink Senior Member Posts 1066 MI |
Your metaphors really paint the raw emotions of your words ~ A touching write~ Enjoyed ~ Alana |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
ohhhh this was awesome....very much enjoyed... with a surprise ending...very well done. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
ohhhh this was awesome....very much enjoyed... with a surprise ending...very well done. this.... It rolls in The scent of dry poison Carried on the sun scalded air Reeking of almonds and feet Very first paragraph, pulled you in, like a calf on a cowboys rope...I smelled the almonds, but keep the feet please. Seriously, enjoyed. |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Shortysdadd, Gritty, hits the mark. Well done Poet Sky~ ~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~ |
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