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Open Poetry #50

field of peonies

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

0 posted 2018-06-03 02:10 PM

The sky did not move for you,
For you, me, I raise eyes,
I scrutinize clouds,
For you too, I pull curtains
And drive in a blue car
Filled with sky and with memories,
The road is a field of peonies
Where I can forget I miss you.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2018-06-03 05:58 PM

Very strong images and feeling. Good job! ~L

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

2 posted 2018-06-03 07:27 PM

Thanks Lori, the poem is inspired by a love gone

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2018-06-03 08:53 PM

Wow, one of your best, my friend!

j.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

4 posted 2018-06-03 09:53 PM

thanks J,

yann

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

5 posted 2018-06-04 11:20 AM

That old sky which is suppose to move to allow love through doesn't always cooperate, and one is left sadly alone.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

6 posted 2018-06-05 09:59 PM

thanks Jerry, what you write is beautiful

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