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la belle dame sans amour
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la belle dame sans amour |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
la belle dame sans amour another rain squall another unknocked door shaking pretensions outta my hair the newsprint of her touch is front page news coffee rings of my mindless wanderings all these things pile up like soccer mom cars on my mind she the word he with a snaking s in front of it she the sound shhh borrows a vowel dare I solve this puzzle dare anyone? it could be worth the time, the march of dimes spent to see her smile melt me woman I stick around all day silly putty in your hands I'm dreaming to be tracing nights embalmed with expensive perfume cherchez la femme! another footfall another unlocked door point the way mon ami just what I'm looking for la belle dame sans amour "Behind every cloud is another cloud."--Judy Garland |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
A blend of French and English. ...just bein' Bluesy |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Really good work here! As I'm writing this I realized the French for emphasis works well and has been done by the romantic master PePe Le Pew. Not that your work was humorous. But that the French was a great touch and it really added to the piece. ~L |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
enjoyed...james |
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