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Open Poetry #49

Dilution of promise

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

0 posted 2014-05-16 04:29 PM

The deluge of anticipation
struggles to stay afloat
while rain on the appletree
releases white blooms to the forest

a flourish of daydreams
on this onset of thunderstorms

the clouds play calypso
in the twilight expression
where we come to this vortex
where we can no longer linger

what peaks from the many rains
that storm the endless trees
will inevitably climax, then too soon
the branches will be robbed
of their foliage

as a deluge will trickle down
first into a drizzle, resorped then
into the mere foam at the shoreline

moving further towards the silence, of once,
our lustfilled promise, sadly aborting
within the impending evaporation

[This message has been edited by EmmaRose (05-17-2014 08:23 AM).]

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2014-05-16 04:44 PM

Emma, Emma, Emma. You are on fire my talented friend. The "anticipation to the white blooms" sets the pace for the rest of the poem, and you do not disappoint. When daydreams are onset by thunderstorms the pain is obvious. Your continued fantastic wordplay in poem after poem is just magical, even to the last verse when lustfilled promises are aborted. Yesssss!

~*~ Sex on television can't hurt you unless you fall off. ~*~

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

2 posted 2014-05-16 04:47 PM

thank you so much for your thought filled response to my poem

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2014-05-17 07:48 AM

EmmaRose~
Yeah, what Jerry said!!!

Lori

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2014-05-19 03:28 PM

Great write, ER. Enjoyed!

wordancer
Senior Member

since 2000-07-30

Posts 809
VA

5 posted 2014-05-21 02:39 PM

where we come to this vortex
where we can no longer linger

this part talked to me ... not quite sure why, but it appeals, thanks

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2014-06-04 12:42 PM

very nice...James

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