Open Poetry #49 |
Better Than Some, Worse Than Others |
Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
Love passed by my window all of five-foot-four Relish on the table anyone know the score? A hellish night in 'Frisco led me to believe A tenderloin is tasted just above the knee She left without a whisper in the ear left by the door I could have loved her better if I would have loved her more [This message has been edited by Ron (01-04-2017 11:56 PM).] |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
i think we need time to love someone really, may be she didn't let you enough time together, a touching and subtle penning yann |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Classic last two lines, Blues, and I only have one thing to say to that . . . "Ain't dat da truff." ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
Thank you yann for your sensitive reply. BTS ...just bein' Bluesy |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
Thanks JerryPat! It sho' is! ...just bein' Bluesy |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I have read this several times and I like it but I'm kind of at a loss as what to say about it. The line about the relish and the score, put me in mind of a football junkie and they always make me wonder if they are emotionally capable of being that passionate about their mates. It is a sad poem really. ~L |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
quote:All things considered, you did fine Lori Rhoden. Thanks for looking it over as you did. As a writer of poetry, one might say that I'm better than some and worse than others. I generally think like that. It helps keep my head the size I like it to be. BTS ...just bein' Bluesy |
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DaysofView Member
since 2014-04-01
Posts 433Just A Slice Of The Pie |
I like rhyming poetry and this one is good! I want to die in my sleep like my grandfather...not like the passengers screaming in the back of his car. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I suppose if our goal is Love we will achieve it...if the others goal is Love...James |
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Boomer Styles Member
since 2014-03-02
Posts 194South Side Of Success |
Such as it is. Good title too. One ladle serves the soup that feeds the mouths of the many. |
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