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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

0 posted 2016-12-03 02:48 AM

Know how to fade,
Know how to be transparent,
Then get this transparency, increase it
to crown the fragile dragonfly
Or cross the look of the mistress.

Boomer Styles
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since 2014-03-02

Posts 194
South Side Of Success

1 posted 2016-12-03 03:53 AM

Abstract thoughts in your poem that hover around nature and her wonders, like dragonflies, yet draw the reader into more free thinking. You write with total abandonment yann and it's great!

One ladle serves the soup that feeds the mouths of the many.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2016-12-03 10:47 AM

The whole poem, Yann, is one that I could quote here, but why in the world would I do that . . . Just look above and reread it. Stunning thought process!

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

3 posted 2016-12-03 11:08 AM

Interesting thoughts surfacing in this piece

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

4 posted 2016-12-08 06:44 PM

thanks a lot boomer, this is the kind of poem difficult to write, because a you say, there is a lot of abandon here, "very pointful"
have a good day
yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2016-12-08 06:46 PM

thanks Jerry, i am happy the poem moved you that point, and inspired you

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

6 posted 2016-12-08 06:47 PM

thanks rex, kind and nice expression,

have a good day

yann

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

7 posted 2016-12-31 04:55 AM

These are the fragile thoughts of a dreamer, yann.
Ida

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

8 posted 2016-12-31 12:33 PM

thanks ida, i guess you are true and see me as i am now, i have not always been a dreamer and may change as days come

bon réveillon
yann

DaysofView
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since 2014-04-01

Posts 433
Just A Slice Of The Pie

9 posted 2017-01-02 04:37 PM

Such a free thinker you are yann!

I want to die in my sleep like my grandfather...not like the passengers screaming in the back of his car.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

10 posted 2017-01-02 08:49 PM

thanks dayofview, writing is important and a place of freedom, let's enjoy that,

have a good day

yann

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