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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2016-11-02 02:21 PM



I hear sounds in the dark hour that bite,
There is a reason I'm all hunkered down,
Upon my window salivates the night.

I sit here with all my candles and write,
Dreaming of my lady in satin gowns,
I hear sounds in the dark hour that bite.

My woman believes I am her White Knight,
But times such as now I feel like a clown,
Upon my window salivates the night.

Wonder what she'd think if she knew my fright?
I sit here writing, wearing a half crown,
I hear sounds in the dark hour that bite.

I hope that she never knows of my plight,
As I write by candles in my ghost town,
Upon my window salivates the night.

My last name is Poe, and fear I invite,
My sweet Annabel's smile will be a frown.
I hear sounds in the dark hour that bite.
Upon my window salivates the night.

©September 17, 2016 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

© Copyright 2016 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
Ari Squire
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In The Phallus Lane
1 posted 2016-11-02 07:48 PM


quote:
"Upon my window salivates the night"
In a word...'brilliant'!


Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

[This message has been edited by Ari Squire (11-02-2016 11:54 PM).]

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2016-11-02 08:00 PM


Thank you, Ari, sometimes the words just come out right, huh

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

jjote
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since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2016-11-03 12:02 PM


lovely villanelle Jerry. Missed doing this, and missed this site. Can't stay away forever it seems
JerryPat2
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4 posted 2016-11-03 12:37 PM


Thank you so much jjote, for your kind thoughts. Yeah, PiP sure isn't anything like it was. I've threatened to leave forever, but always find my way back. Nowadays I just accept what is . . .

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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5 posted 2016-11-05 06:52 AM


Good job Jerry!
"Upon my window salivates the night" is just a killer line! ~L


JerryPat2
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6 posted 2016-11-05 08:45 AM


Thank you, Lori. Good seeing you here. I appreciate your thoughts.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

2islander2
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by the sea
7 posted 2016-11-06 04:09 PM


so remarkable and so well done, the music too is very sweetn


yann

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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South Louisiana
8 posted 2016-11-06 04:22 PM


Thank you, Yann, for your comforting comments.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

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