I Thought Of You Today - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Open Poetry #49

I Thought Of You Today

Redstart
Senior Member

since 2014-05-16

Posts 535

0 posted 2016-08-08 06:58 PM

I thought of you today;
wondered what your children might look like.
Wondered about that old oak tree;
do you remember?
The one with initials carved
naïve enough to miscomprehend
the meaning of eternal?
I doubt there's any sadness
when I tell you that
it's now a McDonald's.
Time is a cold-hearted conquistador,
no ounce of sentimentality.
I had a double burger with cheese and relish.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2016-08-08 07:37 PM

I've had those thoughts.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Redstart
Senior Member

since 2014-05-16

Posts 535

2 posted 2016-08-08 07:41 PM

Thanks, Jerry, you make me smile. I don't feel so alone now.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2016-08-09 01:34 PM

Classic paving of paradise and all that it implies. Your ending was really perfect, and carries a hidden message, double meaning. All for a couple bucks. You are a wonderful poet Red.

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.