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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2016-07-20 08:37 AM



as I stand here and gaze
into the heavens
this dark, inky sky
ahhh . . .
now I see you my love
my bright, shining Gibbous Moon
the dark cloud
moved on into the night
showing the heavens my spirituality
for I am as one
whether you are a mere Crescent Moon
timidly showing
mere tantalizing part of yourself
I may only guess
what is hidden
in the darkness which is you
its as if you are having wicked fun
at my expense
time gives me the taste of
your delicious and tempting Half Moon
glow of iridescence revealing
more of yourself
although it seems the more you show
the more is hidden
you are giving me an exotic, spectral dance
befitting your lofty aspirations
an enticing, though half naked smile
I stand here
wishing the nights would flow faster
as each night
slowly evolves into the next one
you know I will
be there again and again
waiting
patiently waiting
for your final unveiling
which will finally bring to light
my patient lover
you in all your majestic glory
a huge, bright and lustrous
Full Moon rising
I almost sob

©May 12, 2016 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

© Copyright 2016 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
jjote
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1 posted 2016-07-20 09:15 AM


enticing imagery - I couldn't wait for the finale - the unveiling of WHAT? OHHH...a big, fat, full moon.
enjoyed Jerry

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2016-07-20 09:48 AM


Thank you ever much, jjote . . .

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Ari Squire
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In The Phallus Lane
3 posted 2016-07-22 12:37 PM


May I say in reply to your very well crafted poem Jerry, that I wandered as a 'Crescent', became a "Gibbous" when I found hope and emerged 'Full, bright and shining when I fell in love with Linny Jean. She is my celestial angel of grace and charm.
quote:
"you know I will be there again and again
waiting patiently waiting for your final unveiling
which will finally bring to light my patient lover"
This I quote of your poem is, "poetry in motion  (remembering Johnny Burnette) and it moves me every time I read it.

Thanks for the above space Jerry. Your pen has a perpetual glow about it. Always 'full and shining'.  


Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

JerryPat2
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4 posted 2016-07-22 08:51 AM


Ari, thank you so much for this comment. Remarkable and received with gratitude.

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JL
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Texas, USA
5 posted 2016-07-22 10:12 AM


Very nice write, JP.
Enjoyed!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JerryPat2
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6 posted 2016-07-22 11:16 AM


Thanks, JL, I appreciate your thoughts!

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2islander2
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by the sea
7 posted 2016-07-22 11:28 AM


This moon is a gift for love , and for the pleasure to read all these enlightning verses

so well done
yann

JerryPat2
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8 posted 2016-07-22 11:51 AM


Appreciate your kind thoughts about my poem, Yann.

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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9 posted 2016-07-23 08:16 AM


You honor Lady Luna well in this piece. I think the moon moves us all. We just can't all put it in words like you.~L
JerryPat2
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South Louisiana
10 posted 2016-07-23 08:27 AM


Gracious Lori, how you talk . . . Heh.Heh Keep it up . . .

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