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Packing up my life
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Packing up my life |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada 
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 [just reinventing an old freeverse poem posted at Corner Pub I think - Jerry, you've got me hooked on villanelles, honing it some more] "sunset and evening star, and one clear call for me" Dusk settles in, bruising the sky purple I fear not what is beyond the unknown, I will soar high and bold like an eagle winds may shake the trees until they tremble while the birds fly in aimless abandon dusk settles in, bruising the sky purple. gloom takes control over dreams of people relentless pursuit of ambitions lost I will soar high and bold like an eagle ocean breakers a gray restless curdle but stars will shine and lighten the heavens dusk settles in, bruising the sky purple in a secret garden stands a temple there I shall follow a flock of swallows I will soar high and bold like an eagle. I won't find it hard to pack up my life find my nesting place when I hear that call dusk settles in, bruising the sky purple I will soar high and bold like an eagle. @jjote 03/15/16 [Using the lines from CROSSING THE BAR – by Alfred Lord Tennyson to inspire this poem “Sunset and evening star, and one clear call for me”] [This message has been edited by jjote (03-15-2016 05:32 PM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I loved the clarity and intensity within the lines of this very well done in the "ten syllable line, jjote. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
nice...I really liked the title you chose...james |
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