Open Poetry #49 |
Emotion |
Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
She wound emotion round and round the stake of present times and secured the ends to resolve to prevent escape and leakage out of two blue eyes. She feels the twirl and whirl within and so the walls are fortified, the exits double bolted, and she feeds detachment in the hope of forcing speedy growth. There’ll come a time o’er yonder hill when freedom will be celebrated and emotion will fall to ground to finally be trodden on and be as if it never was. So she wonders why not let it go but emotion far too meaningful to end up in the dirt and so the perimeter is electrified. It may die for lack of air and care but that’s alright, you know, because then she’ll know at last she’s joined the human race! Helen / 14 March 2016 |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
So good to see you back, Helen . . . quote: Those are two dynamic sentences, my friend, the poem was excellent! ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you, Jerry. I'm not sure about the "excellent" bit but I sure do appreciate you saying so. Thanks and be well. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Helen, you are a deep little gal! I'm not sure I understand everything you're trying to get across here but I do think emotion of certain kinds is very important. Like this verse in your poem.... "So she wonders why not let it go but emotion far too meaningful to end up in the dirt and so the perimeter is electrified." You know, love and things like that...... However, I don't know much, so I'll shut my keyboard down for now. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Hi Eric, Your comment brought a smile to my lips. It's just that sometimes (and a lot of times these days) I just want to cry because of what's twirling and whirling inside but, no, I lock it up instead. Thanks for the read. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Love to follow your train of thought Helen. Ida |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks, Ida. I'm trying hard to turn off that train of thoughts but as yet haven't quite succeeded. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
enjoyed reading this...james |
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Ari Squire Member Posts 488 In The Phallus Lane |
To be sensitive enough about your feelings and yet not comfortable expressing them is what poetry is for. It doesn't 'fix' anything, but it is, at the very least, an outlet for them. One can be alone with someone or by themselves with these 'brewed and bottled up' feelings. Either way its hell-on two feet. More feelings and fewer words please |
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