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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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South Africa

0 posted 2016-03-14 04:09 PM


She wound emotion round and round
the stake of present times
and secured the ends to resolve
to prevent escape and leakage
out of two blue eyes.

She feels the twirl and whirl within
and so the walls are fortified,
the exits double bolted,
and she feeds detachment
in the hope of forcing speedy growth.

There’ll come a time o’er yonder hill
when freedom will be celebrated
and emotion will fall to ground
to finally be trodden on
and be as if it never was.

So she wonders why not let it go
but emotion far too meaningful
to end up in the dirt
and so the perimeter is electrified.

It may die for lack of air and care
but that’s alright, you know,
because then she’ll know at last
she’s joined the human race!

Helen / 14 March 2016


© Copyright 2016 Helen - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2016-03-14 06:42 PM


So good to see you back, Helen . . .
quote:
but emotion far too meaningful
to end up in the dirt

Those are two dynamic sentences, my friend, the poem was excellent!

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
2 posted 2016-03-14 11:34 PM


Thank you, Jerry.  I'm not sure about the "excellent" bit but I sure do appreciate you saying so.  Thanks and be well.
ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
3 posted 2016-03-15 10:35 AM


Helen, you are a deep little gal!

I'm not sure I understand everything you're trying to get across here but I do think emotion of certain kinds is very important. Like this verse in your poem....

"So she wonders why not let it go
but emotion far too meaningful
to end up in the dirt
and so the perimeter is electrified."

You know, love and things like that......

However, I don't know much, so I'll shut my keyboard down for now.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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South Africa
4 posted 2016-03-15 10:54 AM


Hi Eric, Your comment brought a smile to my lips.   It's just that sometimes (and a lot of times these days) I just want to cry because of what's twirling and whirling inside but, no, I lock it up instead.  Thanks for the read.  
Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
5 posted 2016-04-03 01:46 AM


Love to follow your train of thought Helen.
                               Ida

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
6 posted 2016-04-03 02:26 AM


Thanks, Ida.  I'm trying hard to turn off that train of thoughts but as yet haven't quite succeeded.  
JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2016-04-05 07:42 PM


enjoyed reading this...james
Ari Squire
Member
Posts 488
In The Phallus Lane
8 posted 2016-04-05 11:53 PM


To be sensitive enough about your feelings and yet not comfortable expressing them is what poetry is for. It doesn't 'fix' anything, but it is, at the very least, an outlet for them. One can be alone with someone or by themselves with these 'brewed and bottled up' feelings. Either way its hell-on two feet.

More feelings and fewer words please

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