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Solitary dreaming |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada 
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 [a villanelle] Lakeshore entices me with its silence I dream I can walk above the waters the wind whispers and leaves a scud of foam. Like a wisp of smoke, unease creeps in me the city behind me remains passive Lakeshore entices me with its silence I give up the search for new beginnings a measure of bliss well earned be my cup the wind whispers and leaves a scud of foam hope slinks and recedes towards rainbow's end some mythical god pulls me to its arms lakeshore entices me with its silence destiny is an avalanche rushing in slow motion, while I sit feeling stunned the wind whispers and leaves a scud of foam. I hug my solitude as tide ebbs low time stirs like the trees and soon collapses lakeshore entices me with its silence the wind whispers and leaves a scud of foam. @jjote 03/10/16 |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
To sit quietly and give your mind a rest and accept the reason you are where you are, and who you are is a blessed thing. If, as you ponder and come up with problems within, there is no better place to be in order to sort them out. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
Thanks JP for being so intuitive, I needed that...these days, writing is the only way to lift me up, never mind if I tend to write dark things |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
pleasure to read...james |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
An excellent Villanelle..a joy to read as it exposeses what this form was made to do. Explanation of the theme, and reiteration. This poem reminds me of what I sometimes do when I place stones in a garden of my own design.. It also is very much part of the story line of the poem. What I see here, when I slightly cross my eyes is the placement of two stones in a Zen garden. The larger being (the human) in the picture represents the Master-the smaller being (the dog) is the student. The master never loses patience with the student, and the student never loses patience wwith the master. Maybe I read too much into things? But visuals, and poetry make me think deeply. Thank you for the poem... :-) Nameste |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Nicely done and I really love the choice of picture! Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
oops, forgot about the rhyming scheme for villanelles, 1st 3rd lines ahould rhyme. thanks JP, james, eric & ice or the read, though |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
thank you Jjote, this is beautiful and I know it fits so many who are feeling a bit of wonder and whys. Jo perry |
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