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Open Poetry #49

Spinning the Rim Wheel

DaysofView
Member

since 2014-04-01

Posts 433
Just A Slice Of The Pie

0 posted 2016-02-28 08:40 PM

when I read your poems
I think of all your words that I could put in cans
they would store easily
they don't take up too much space
and they're always fresh
when I want to eat them up
sometimes they’re happy words
that taste sweet and sassy
sometimes they’re sad words
that are moist and tear filled
I want those the most
because if I eat all those words up
then they'll all be gone
and then only the happy
cans of words will be left
I'll share those happy cans of words with you
and take all the sad cans you may fill

but I'll only share those sometimes though
if I too am feeling blue

If I were more than I am, I'd see things differently instead of the same all the time.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2016-02-29 10:27 AM

Great idea! Eat the sad words up and get rid of them.

If you are feeling a little blue sometimes just maybe the happy cans of words will cheer you up.
Unique idea and I enjoyed the read!

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2016-02-29 05:44 PM

Words. Yes words are the lifeblood of the poet. Without words the poet will die, or at least feel like they are dying, which is even worse than actually dying. A can of words. Remarkable idea.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2016-03-02 11:15 PM

this feels so childlike, makes one smile - happy words in cans that one can open and share and keep. And let's not open the cans with sad words, and yes, maybe eat them so they're gone.

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

4 posted 2016-03-03 05:52 PM

DoV, Very unique & whimsical,
liked this very much.

Well done!

J

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2016-03-03 08:43 PM

enjoyed...james

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

6 posted 2016-03-04 09:38 AM

What a cool write! I love the sentiment! ~L

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