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ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2016-01-16 11:02 AM

"The blues are because you're getting fat and maybe it's been raining too long,
you're just sad that's all. The mean reds are horrible.
Suddenly you're afraid and you don't know what you're afraid of."
Truman Capote "Breakfast At Tiffany's"
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The Mean Reds

Out of sight, something lurks
Inside-invisible shadows
Darken a sunny mind
...you lay in bed, in scare
caused sweat, afraid of what?

The leaden weight, that drops,
And crushes pleasant thoughts.

Short steps, trying to escape;
Night air stabs the lungs,
With the chilly breath
Of a gone down sun-
Refreshing you, somewhat.

But something estranged
From your sight holds up,
The battle flag of inner fright--

Across the valley, far hills echo
Noises of something blood colored-
Dressed in shades of crimson dread,
Against which logic
Wears no mail,or wrap of any other;

Passing time proves poor defense
When the nothing comes down from the steppes
Of endless mind-land plains.
The battle Monsters teeth make bleed;
Again, no walk will bring you comfort,
When you are self estranged.

You swing your logic sword to slash
The devil fiend, in hopes
To hear its last deaths rattle..

But you hear no moan, no silent void,
As the heart of the mean red beast,
Beats on, and on.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2016-01-16 02:09 PM

I know what I did to "the mean red beast." I spit in his eye and kneed him in his testiculars.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2016-01-16 05:19 PM

Thanks Jerry

I bet the beast turned a brighter red when you did that...lol

"Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance."
Carl Sandburg

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2016-01-17 01:35 PM

Ford, you did an amazing job here. The mean reds! Out of nowhere they choke us, indeed.

I have my breathing techniques and of course I must switch on the light ... Tiffany is too far away!

Great write really.

Margherita

(thank you for the explanation of tanka, one day I might try it!)

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