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rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

0 posted 2016-01-12 02:59 PM

Wine Sno-cones~

An old friend dies..
faces of the past
wander in like prodigal
sons and daughters,
we finally own up
to the gray door of departure
we always knew was there,
but foolishly kept hidden
like the secret-garden entrance.

Tears, smiles, recollections
from times when skies were forgiving,
concerts and wine sno-cones,
Summer clung to us,
but innocence shook from our
shoulders in naive shrugs
of urgency.

We scattered as tufts from
the cotton-wood trees,
softly drifting to our own
little corners,
now reuniting over drinks
toasting our friend,
because that's what he
would have wanted.
This gentle spirit,
the sweetest of us all,
who loved Bad-Company,
Oh..how I 'Feel Like Makin' Love'...

© Jan~
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2LHgQ4-5sZI

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2016-01-12 03:39 PM

I love this:
"Summer clung to us,
but innocence shook from our
shoulders in naïve shrugs
of urgency."

I never had a wine sno-cone before. But you can bet I will this summer...I know somebody with a sno-cone machine!

Great Poem! ~L

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2016-01-12 03:41 PM

Ahhh . . . My goodness yes to Bad Company and to the toasts all the way around for the one has slipped into the netherworld.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2016-01-12 06:02 PM

Poignantly beautiful, you are a very talented Poetess, dear Jan.!

Margherita

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

4 posted 2016-01-12 06:06 PM

Thank you Lori, as for the wine sno-cones..
back in the day..I was elected more often
than not to smuggle in the wine at concerts,
we'd buy sno-cones.. finish off the flavored liquid, then pour the wine over.

yep..they're Good

rainyJ

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

5 posted 2016-01-12 07:50 PM

Great poem, J...well done in form and story line..

But, just sing, your friend would have wanted you to sing:

"Its all a part of my rock 'n' roll
fantasy.
Its all part of my rock 'n' roll
dream, yeah."

Namaste

"Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance."
Carl Sandburg

[This message has been edited by ice (01-12-2016 10:04 PM).]

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

6 posted 2016-01-14 06:50 PM

Cheers..JP Thank you for your read & reply.

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

7 posted 2016-01-14 06:51 PM

M, Thank you much for the lovely compliment,
touches my heart.

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

8 posted 2016-01-14 06:54 PM

Oh..Thank you Ice, yes, you're absolutely
right! he would have wanted that.

Thanks again Wise-one.

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