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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

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South Louisiana

0 posted 2015-12-22 11:00 AM

rain coming down hard in the midnight hour
The Hovel is bleak among its solitude
thinking of death as a fix-all cure
walked outside a while ago
allowing the rain to cleanse my body
and mind
seemed to me I was born into solitude
thinking of the ones who have gone on before me
solitude . . . a condition of being
which gives into thinking much too much
of the past
what was done to me
what I have done to others
as I listen to the rain pounding down
helpless to stop it
we are such weak human beings
build monstrous towers
i.e., the tower of Babel
thinking about Genesis of the Good Book
wonder why
went back outside fully clothed
a little while ago
powerless among those alive
those dead
felt like I was crushed
like willowy reeds among the bayou
of my mind
feel so all alone
don’t understand why
on the cold dark thunderous night
for I do have love . . . and
love is complete and perfect
and even if it isn't
it is all I want and need
I came back inside The Hovel
shucked off my wet clothes
dried myself off
realizing the tempest within my heart
put me in a funk
so I sat down and wrote this dark poem
dark yes
but after finishing it
a smile took complete possession of my face

©December 22, 2015 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~ Do what you have to do to feel right,
I'll do my best to be alright. ~

Ticklefingers
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Posts 710
Louisiana

1 posted 2015-12-22 11:22 AM

Maybe we've all felt this way at one time or another JerryPat, which is to say that it comes and goes. But when it doesn't go away on its own, that's when its time to punt it out the door ourselves.

From your mild and warmer conclusion friend, I'd say you kicked it straight between the uprights!

88's always

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2015-12-22 11:35 AM

Yep, that's the way to do it alright!

~L

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2015-12-22 12:03 PM

Ticklefingers, the greatest sages of all time could not have given me better advice than did you. Thanks.

~ Do what you have to do to feel right,
I'll do my best to be alright. ~

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2015-12-22 12:05 PM

Lori, Lori, your short comment said all that needed to be said. I appreciate it and I am smiling . . .Thanks for the hug . . .

~ Do what you have to do to feel right,
I'll do my best to be alright. ~

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2015-12-22 12:19 PM

There are multitudes of people feeling like you described here so powerfully, dear Jerry, but only a few have the will, strength and the skills to come to terms with it, acknowledging it and writing about it.

All those who will relate, and I bet there are many of them, will identify and be reminded of the way to change the mood.

Very well done!

Margherita

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2015-12-22 12:25 PM

Many thanks, Margherita, for giving me the benefit of your special, insightful thoughts . . .

~ Do what you have to do to feel right,
I'll do my best to be alright. ~

rainyday
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Posts 304
Heartland USA

7 posted 2015-12-22 07:11 PM

Could almost feel the chill of the rain,
& the warmth of the smile at the close.

Holiday-Hugs..

rainy

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

8 posted 2015-12-22 07:34 PM

Thank you Rain for sending your special warmth to me and my poem . . .

~ Do what you have to do to feel right,
I'll do my best to be alright. ~

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

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lost in blue pages

9 posted 2016-01-02 03:30 PM

~*so I sat down and wrote this dark poem
dark yes
but after finishing it
a smile took complete possession of my face*~

a dark poem that changed by your last line
light sets in with a smile

thank you for sharing

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

10 posted 2016-01-02 03:38 PM

Many, many thanks, Charisma. That last line, to me, is my life up until now. I have lived in the dark for so long (two lost decades), but these days I have banished the darkness within me and am very happy as I sit and write this response to your comment.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

11 posted 2016-03-14 11:41 PM

"so I sat down and wrote this dark poem
dark yes
but after finishing it
a smile took complete possession of my face"

As I once said tears and laughter come and go from time to time and we never really know what brings them forth. Glad you found your smile, Jo

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

12 posted 2016-03-15 10:30 AM

Jerry
Dug deep and flushed it all out with a smile at the end.

Enjoyed the read very much.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

DaysofView
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since 2014-04-01

Posts 433
Just A Slice Of The Pie

13 posted 2016-03-15 10:59 AM

Its great to know you have a BIG smile to offer yourself and us after all you have done and went through! Here's a happy one back for you!

If I were more than I am, I'd see things differently instead of the same all the time.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

14 posted 2016-03-15 02:01 PM

Jo, your response grounded me as I thought back to yesterday morning. I had such intense emotions flooding through me that I sat here and cried over music I was playing. WoW!

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

15 posted 2016-03-15 02:03 PM

Many, Many thanks, Eric! I am always happy to see you here.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JerryPat2
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Posts 16975
South Louisiana

16 posted 2016-03-15 02:04 PM

Ahhh . . . Thank you for that wonderful smile you graced me with, DV.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19

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Antarctica

17 posted 2016-03-17 06:32 AM

This brought me in for the ride. Your style is subtle and the simplicity masks a somber intelligence.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

18 posted 2016-03-17 08:51 AM

I thank you, XGarapanX, for your wonderful words concerning the poem of mind. They made me feel alive so early in the morning. early in the day.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

jjote
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since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

19 posted 2016-03-18 03:06 PM

rain cleanses, not only physical sense, but good for the soul and mind - glad you're taking it in this context. And I used to love rains, how cozy it can be sharing one umbrella with someone you like -(I grew up in a country where great rains bring on great floods, but this doesn't faze me)

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

20 posted 2016-03-18 03:20 PM

Ah, jjote, and speaking of rain, it's been raining like the devil most of the day down here in the swamp. Thank you for your very kind words, and so do I love the rain.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

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