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Receding Man
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Pete_W Member Posts 185 Scotland (UK) |
Receding Man After mum died Dad never slept in their bedroom, morning sun would find him sat on their bed with a memory and her fading scent. Later, confused, he could not be sure if there was a bathroom in the house, whether two other people lived in the front bedroom, if this was his home. One evening he said “I wanted to go down the road, see what the boys were up to”, then sagged, like someone soon to be lost, someone in the sea waving their arms, that I could swim out to but never bring back, and said… “but I’ve changed my mind now”. December 2015 |
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Ticklefingers Senior Member Posts 710 Louisiana |
Losing someone you love is unique in that we all react to it a little differently. Most know the feeling and those that don't likely will before they themselves die. You captured one close to you very well. 88's friend She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast". |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very poignant write, Pete. Men seem to have more difficulties to cope with life after the loss of their life partners. One of the worst things that can happen is what you rendered here so powerfully, the fading clarity of mind. Margherita |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excellent poetry-enjoyed reading it "Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance." |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
The last stanza tells me that he has finally understood that she was gone and was not coming back. ~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~ |
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rainyday Member Posts 304 Heartland USA |
Very heart-touching write Pete. Well written dear Poet. rainy |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
its a process that can be troubling...every one we get attached too, someday we or they must say our goodbyes......james |
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