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jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2015-11-27 11:31 AM

They romped tireless on the beach
taking shade under a huge
umbrella, waiting to catch
the sun in dying colors.

My granddaughters built boxes
of their hands, peering at the
sun through their fingers, pretend
they had on horse’s blinders.

Never red was a rainbow –
So they invented new shades:
Dark Tomato Catsup, Ripe
Plum, Golden Syrup, Fried-Just-
Right Chile-dog, Strawberries
and Ripe Cherries-in-season,
Ready-to-eat Nectarine,
and best of all – Ice Cream in
Rich-Fudge Chocolate, yum yum.

One more time before summer ended
they watched it drop in graceful curtsy
near purple as it embraced the edge of sea -
a grand old dame making an elegant exit.

@jjote 11272015

Ticklefingers
Senior Member
Posts 710
Louisiana

1 posted 2015-11-27 11:43 AM

Such a lovely image of children and their ever-so-innocent perspectives. This is what the world really needs; to be more childlike.

Fabulous line here Miss jjote:

quote:
"a grand old dame making an elegant exit".

You spread a good deal of happiness with your poetry.

88's friend

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2015-11-27 12:01 PM

Oh boy, was this one ever jam-packed with vision, colorful language, and best of all a newness and innocent way of thinking.

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2015-11-27 08:36 PM

this is wonderful...james

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

4 posted 2015-11-28 09:50 AM

Love it when a poet captures moments and, expresses them well in harmony, and diction..
Well done J.

Mr Martini
Member
Posts 366
Beneath The Line

5 posted 2015-11-28 11:47 AM

I would take license and forego the image of grandchildren, if I may, as I relate to this first of your offering.

"They romped tireless on the beach
taking shade under a huge
umbrella, waiting to catch
the sun in dying colors".

I thought that we were alone.

Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me!

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 2015-11-28 09:34 PM

Thanks everyone for taking time to read.

Mr. M, are you thinking of starting the 2nd verse of "I thought we were alone"...who's "we", sorry I can't get your drift. I could be dense this morning

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

7 posted 2015-11-28 09:43 PM

Loved this jjote..from beginning to end.
Your imaging was wonderful, & the last stanza
right as rain.

Enjoyed..

Pete_W
Member
Posts 185
Scotland (UK)

8 posted 2015-11-30 11:57 AM

I can imagine the peals of laughter at each successively extreme invented colour, great images in your writing.
Thanks
Pete

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