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Days of Blue
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ You were the waves lapping at my feet the sun and moon engaging the sea. You were the beaded strand shimmering in the starlight slipping away on the horizon. Casting nets from all sides, you were the buoy that kept me afloat and I knew no other way than to hold you close. Until time took it's toll, over time. So I went about untangling the ties and sordid lines, washing away my resolve through the course of forty knots and fickle winds luring me in. It is those turn of events that go unnoticed. Those weights and measures sinking to the bottom, buried beneath the blue ocean of hope dragging my heart down. Sifting through scattered sands slow the shifting that settles the drifting, distancing the shore and the idle pull to be near you. Carried away, like hidden jewels that preen in the sunlight polished and set smooth teemed with the elements become worn and weathered from the rise and fall. Lulled by the rippled remains left in the wake of summer's spell rocked by the warmest rain and those days of blue when all that glittered, shimmered silver and gold. ~*~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
What a truly compelling piece of writing you have here, Blues. You give the reader such tender moments to dwell upon, even, as you said in your own way, time erodes things. This is my absolute favorite verse of the poem . . . quote: Your Muse was in fine form when "Days of Blue" was written. Each stanza is classic, wonderful poetry. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Yea my muse and I never made it very far, I guess you could say we started sinking as soon as we set sail. Thank you for leaving such a nice reply JP, I really appreciate it. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
enjoyed this sad but so beautiful piece |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
simply superb ! (grand-fine, passionately and emotively sad and romantic). great writing! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I like the way you keep with the metaphor. It's effectively done. Your images are strong, and I especially like the weights sinking to the bottom, and taking your heart with them. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Rex, dreampoet, and miss pilgram...thank you all for reading my poem and leaving a little something for me. Happy hump day to you... |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
you speak those ebb and flow words real smoothly , with grace and style |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you for your kind words Emma. I am delighted to see you here. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Oh Bluesy, I wish you would publish your poetry.. it warms and entices like no other.. I absolutely love this You have such an exquisite and wondrous spirit, you are a peach Never stop expressing yourself You’re poetry is the honey in my tea What a great smile <3 |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
What a nice thing to say Richy. You make me swoon...thank you always. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Bluesy gal, your writing is amazing which means you are amazing too. To write it is to feel it. I'm sorry you had to feel what you have written about here but if not we would have missed out on great poetry. Thank you! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Blues,you are indeed a poet one wants to keep reading. Lovey work.Jo |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
wow! this in such a wonderful image filled write - I enjoyed this very much xx Love is the life of the soul... |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I used to think you had a golden pen... that everything you wrote turned to gold somehow... this one is far too precious to simply put that label on. Wonderful wording. I'm so glad you bear your soul for us. Michael |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you honey girl, Jo, Tracie and Michael. Your comments mean a lot to me. Michael...you honor me with your kind words...from one soul bearer to another.  Thank you sincerely. |
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Redstart Senior Member
since 2014-05-16
Posts 535 |
If anything could be described as a pleasure to read, it this poem. It absolutely oozes gentle nostalgia and longing. A plethora of grand metaphor and beautifully flowing lines. A poem to be most proud of. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Blues Ah, your name fits you perfectly! I couldn't figure out why I was avoiding reading this until I did. I related hard. It was a bizarre combo of my two dead ex's. Your metaphors were to die for. Your imagery was National Geographic on a movie screen. Today was a good day to go there.   ~L |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Funny what the insight of age gives one, isn't it? The way it causes one to look back with so many what if's, could'a beens, had beens, the way it makes us believe things were better then (even if they might have been), the way one's reality becomes skewed . . . Memories - where would one be without them... j. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
A pleasure as usual, Blues. Ida |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Blusie, so nice to read you again, and oh, that bittersweet feeling of lose, makes for the best words of poetry and inspiration...and it is from those painful moments, we learn to celebrate the wonders of life.... Hugs |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
enjoyed reading...james |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Now THAT, my friend, is a blues serenade.  And it's magnificent like the most gorgeous sigh on a heart lifting, soul drifting rainy day. Or something like that. To the library this goes! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Sifting through scattered sands slow the shifting that settles the drifting, distancing the shore and the idle pull to be near you. Ahh, that pull ... you really wrap me into your emotions with your compelling composition, dear Lori! You always are deeply inspiring and it is a gift to read you. Love, Margherita |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
The images from your poem caught me as if I were in a web - a delicate and beautiful web. You make me happy that I took the time to return and read. A |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
came back on one of my yearly visits and found that this was your latest posting still... it was nice to read it again and think of all the happy memories I have from here.. but mainly I just wanted to say hello Bluesy and Happy Thanksgiving... I hope these words find your eyes a twinkle Always, your pal Richy  |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
I could never miss an opportunity to hear from you Richy. I know the board will light up like Christmas tree when folks find you back on the block! A finer pen than yours never scratched the surface of the blue. Have a ball pal, and never forget how many 'Bluesys' are in the 'room'! Seeya... BTS ...just bein' Bluesy |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh Richy, you really know how to put a twinkle in my eye and warm my heart to no end. Yes there are so many memories aren't there, ones I hold near and dear. I'm so glad you stopped by. I'm always missing you...  |
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Pete_W Member Posts 185 Scotland (UK) |
Wonderful writing, overflowing with images, enjoyed very much. Pete |
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