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Ticklefingers
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0 posted 2015-10-23 02:42 AM


pond full of petals
fingers of flowering seers
tell me of her love

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
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1 posted 2015-10-23 07:25 AM


oh the bittersweet angst of love! I envy not the position. But it make for some great writing my friend! ~L
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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2 posted 2015-10-23 09:19 AM


Ah, this senryu is full of passion and hope, with a bit of hurt mixed in if I dissected it correctly.

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Ticklefingers
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3 posted 2015-10-23 12:04 PM


Thanks Miss Lori and JerryPat for your visits.

The process of 'picking petals' is indeed "bittersweet" Miss Lori and the "bit of hurt" you mentioned JerryPat depends on which petal is the last..."She Loves Me, She Loves Me Not"!

True love is hardly based on the 'luck of the draw', but it's fun and romantic in its way to think about it as such.

...then there's all that work


88's friends

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

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