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jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2015-10-23 12:13 PM

My Demons

Enabled my demons.

Thought maybe
they could withhold you
from my thoughts.

Ha!

They only provoked rage –
against you, for leaving;
against me, for giving myself
so thoroughly;
against God,
for allowing it to happen.
against;
against . . .

I cried –
the anguish swelling every tear;
like acid they burned down my cheeks,
dripped from my chin,
sizzled where they touched
the earth.

I lay the roses,
one yellow,
one red (your favorites),
where your breast would be,
where my hand lingered
in the grass,
feeling for any warmth
that might be left.

My demons,
all of them,
cried tears with me.

© wesley james beard, jr.

(Please don't assume everything I write is based on my personal life...)

Ticklefingers
Senior Member
Posts 710
Louisiana

1 posted 2015-10-23 01:29 AM

Identifying your demons is the first step.

Imagine how this poetry would sound if you had eradicated your demons before you wrote it, assuming they are your demons and not someone else's.

God knows, there's plenty of them to go around.

This was intensely expressive:

quote:
the anguish swelling every tear;
like acid they burned down my cheeks,
dripped from my chin,
sizzled where they touched
the earth.

Good read Mr. Beard.

88's friend

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

[This message has been edited by Ticklefingers (10-23-2015 12:07 PM).]

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2015-10-23 07:54 AM

Jimmy
Grief so deep even your demons were tore up!
Dude! Way to write on my friend! You are so convincing! One never knows if it is coming from your imagination or reality. That is what makes you sooo good! ~L

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2015-10-23 09:17 AM

I understand where you are coming from, Jimmy. We all have our demons, and we all fight against them in different ways. Expressing yourself as you have in this poem is one of the best ways to "get down" in the battle against them.

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2015-10-23 11:14 AM

Ticklefingers -

If I had eradicated the demons,
this piece would never have existed.
The problem, in this piece, is not the demons,
but death itself.

Lori seems to have caught that, and as a writer
I don't consider one out of three a bad average
for having readers, in all their diversity, see,
the same thing this writer does.

Thanks for the read - and responses, whether they see what I see or not, are always appreciated.

Jerry -

Yes, our demons, in whatever form they take
live, (cigarettes, booze, those ones between our ears and so many more)
can literally make us a husk of humanity - and we have to live with that.
Fortunately, the first two, extremely prevalent and powerful,
were never ones of mine -

I understand yours (some mine as well)
and empathize deeply.

Lori -

Thank you does little to express the warmth emanating from me to you . . . but, Thank You.

j.

Ticklefingers
Senior Member
Posts 710
Louisiana

5 posted 2015-10-23 12:13 PM

Just a little levity based on your 'disclaimer' Mr. Beard.

88's friend

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

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