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Open Poetry #49

Morning Becomes Him

Redstart
Senior Member

since 2014-05-16

Posts 535

0 posted 2015-10-21 08:51 PM

Morning becomes him.
He hides behind the dunes of past evils;
attempts to dance a Beach-Boy serenade.
But the sea knows where he hides:
he's dressed in words of false regret.
Tango, madam? No, I see your strut of shame.
Lie down, the sea is coming.
If only for the truth.......
let her take you down.

Ticklefingers
Senior Member
Posts 710
Louisiana

1 posted 2015-10-22 01:45 AM

Liked the "Beach-Boys" serenade Red.

For me, your line of poetry made me think of Sandy Point, at Lake Zurich where the loudspeaker barked out Orange Julius concoctions between "Barbara Ann" and "Surfer Girl".

Gotta hand it to you, your poetry was a good read friend.

88's atcha

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

2 posted 2015-11-18 11:36 PM

A cool Poem Redstart, it made me think of someone I used to know.

rainyday J

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2015-11-18 11:46 PM

If I still remember it right, there's a song that says "moonlight becomes you"...this is reminiscent of it..and I like
the sea knows where he hides

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2015-11-19 06:33 AM

hey Red-
"Lie down, the sea is coming.
If only for the truth.......
let her take you down."

These lines blew me away! `L

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2015-11-30 07:31 PM

enjoyed reading this...james

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