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Feelings unexpected.
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Feelings unexpected. |
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J.J.thomas Member Posts 84 |
It was a typical day. You came in for the interview. Nothing special to think of... at that moment. Not knowing there were going to be more. Weeks pass. A brown dress. Simple. Lunch on the patio. With her father. Our first words were spoken. A half hour of them. Laughter erupted. Weeks pass. We meet again. There is laughter once more. New moments start to become evident. The time line becomes a blur now. Phone numbers exchanged hands and it began. Days pass. The birthday party was a blast. Coffee girls, we laughed. Her father's joke we ran with fast. Hugs shared. A seed begins to sprout, causting pleasent and unexpected feelings previously unknown about. Days pass. Late night phone calls reveal more of the moments. Words crash like recking balls into new areas of thought. Where could this path lead? Knowing only it could make such fragile beingings bleed, if handled carelessly. weeks pass. Suddenly circumstances change. Personal which is understood. Slowly the stream of words trickle to a hault. The flower once watered daily, must now struggle through an unanticipated drought. Days pass. Clouds cover the light. Shadows of doubt try to sneak up. The flower sits, not willing to hide. Wondering if that bright sun, filled with warmth, will once more come out? Days continue to pass... [This message has been edited by J.J.thomas (08-31-2015 01:20 PM).] |
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J.J.thomas Member Posts 84 |
Idk if I put the right title on this poem... |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
Frankly, I was looking for the coffee girls, not sure if you're having coffee with another girl. *lol* |
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J.J.thomas Member Posts 84 |
Thank you for your feed back. I appriciate it. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
enjoyed reading this...james |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I like the title it invited me in to read and did not disappoint. I think you did an excellent job of capturing the ebb and flow of how a relationship can start (or not) I thought it was very honest portrayal. ~L |
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J.J.thomas Member Posts 84 |
thank you lori i appriciate a detailed feed back. it helps greatly and pushes me to write more. |
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