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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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Cold black holes shimmer behind A pleasant smile with too much teeth to be comforting. (I've got you) The moment your corners peek and I see you- Burning bright with hatred as one looks upon a wingless bird in flight. Trying to grasp the impossibility between our gazes- held over-long. Your level eyes shy now not reaching mine and I yearn To rip down corners of dark paper from your smile, Just to stop the chills inside- Slipping through me rolling my gut. Such a twisted you Paper-blind on purpose But ah-ha! I've got you. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well, too bad I'm an old guy because I'm not sure what you're trying to get across to the reader. Us old guys aren't always up to speed when it comes to this type of ambiguity......You just might be a modern female version of John Prine. However, it is cleverly written and I'm just wondering if it means you didn't want to get out of bed that morning???? Don't pay too much attention to me I'm wrong more often than right........ Have a great day! true love never looks after it's own interests |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
lol...born country? yes! but I sure can't play guitar like Prine...  I was in a mood... recoverin' from a bad surgery, there are too many doctors and alot of fake concern so far.and too much sterile white, ack! gets overwhelmingly predictable sometimes. tx fer peekin  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
quote: Nice line that. I could see that smile too... one that almost gives shivers. You have quite a way with words these days. here's hoping I ain't on that list I know you've been keeping. Michael |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
list?! Lol..we must speak of this list thingy sumtime Michael... ~d Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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