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J.J.thomas Member Posts 84 |
Who we were when we met What we did back then Every thing we said and promised Does it still have the same power Do you still view me with the same desire Could it be My feeling of lost and lonely Can be healed simply When you say You love me Or is it more complicated Then a show of belated effection I long for the same understanding The same unconditional emotion Once porclaimed from you to myself Thinking now I realize something You still mean the world to me Would you if you dont mind Say something so kind or at least how youre feeling I dont ask for much Just a loving word or touch Bring back that rush Of butterflies Maybe even the sparkle once held in your eyes With a loving kiss A snuggle close Just to feel your arms around me My head on your chest That's always the best So what is it you wish to say Or want to see Just say what ever it might be Im listening This poem has said it all and true Just from me To you |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
It is almost impossible to maintain that excitement of the first few years of love. Too many variables, or life, bills, jobs, etc., any number of things which cause us to lose that spontaneous, energetic feeling. Most of the time it isn't that we don't love each other, it is just that life gets in the way. Those are my thoughts . . . ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I agree with Jerry but in the intervening years after the heated first few I think many forget what brought them together, forget to work to keep it "somewhat" that way, and don't know how to nurture the essence of togetherness - but relationships are wonky-beast anyway and it takes most of us several tries before we "learn" there's more to them than fire and spontaneity. If, in the end, it was fun learning, though, who the heck cares!! enjoyed, j. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
The guys have a point...up to a point. It takes some specific directions from their Lady Fair to keep them emotionally in step. If a simple cuddle and having your man giving you a bit of the attention he gives the TV once in a while makes a world of difference TO YOU. You have to sweetly say so and then proceed to unromantically break it down in to the when where and how directions he can follow. If he chooses not to that is a completely different conversation. I like the flow of your poem and the natural language. The only suggestion I have for your poem is that I noticed some problems with spelling. I am not a good speller so I am amazed I even noticed. Good write! |
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J.J.thomas Member Posts 84 |
yes spelling tends to slip away when i'm in the flow of thought. Also thank you very much for all the feed back. To clarify, its not so much that I think he doesn't love me. It's more I miss some of the little stuff. Our son is almost three so we dont get much time for that lol. Plus he isn't good with talking about his emotions. I was just telling him the simple ways to express himself. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
nice...james |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Never let the romance die, that's the secret, complacency doesn't build anything that remains loyal or solid. Nicely done. |
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