the thunderstorm, withheld

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EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

0 posted 2015-03-11 02:58 PM

Until
the perimeter that guards
the cirrus from the sycamore
and the rush of green across the highway
the rain redundant on the grey of
cobblestones

this song of songs will dim
within the straining notes that rose once
from distant thoughts we wished upon

now undecipherable

like jazz to the untrained ear

as this is sadly
just another, much rehearsed for
but often interrupted,
longing for a thunderstorm,
withheld

[This message has been edited by EmmaRose (03-11-2015 05:10 PM).]

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2015-03-11 03:13 PM

Although the complete poem is soulfully penned, this line stood out to me . . .

quote:
from distant thoughts we wished upon

looking back at what was and what is, is something we cannot seem to help ourselves from doing, Emma. You do it wonderfully . . .

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

2 posted 2015-03-15 04:16 PM

i dont know if its just me but i find a subtle romance in this.. but then i kind of see that in most things...

thank you for letting me enjoy your writing Emma.. have a great sunday

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

3 posted 2015-03-21 08:28 PM

Like! It felt sultry like a thunderstorm building.

A

J.J.thomas
Member
Posts 84

4 posted 2015-04-09 10:15 AM

Good write. Keep it up.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

5 posted 2015-04-11 03:23 PM

interesting 'write!'

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

6 posted 2015-04-12 09:30 AM

I love your way with words even when I'm not sure of your meaning. You always stir emotions within me. Write On! ~L

Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite

since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

7 posted 2015-04-12 10:18 AM

I think, that quite often, in a quiet moment, our thoughts can drift toward the same old haunts. Even though we often wish we could wash them away and bask in the fresh air of that clean sweep... we seem to find something there, we feel has some worth

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

8 posted 2015-04-12 10:38 AM

What can I say - the words are you, always well placed and expressed.

j.

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