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redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
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Franklin, TN

0 posted 2014-12-18 08:49 PM



Remember the first time you fell?
There was noone in sight
nobody to tell
you could feel your heart hit the ground
but when a heart breaks alone
does it make a sound?

Like the sound of crying babys
sobbing themselves to sleep
Like the weight of the world
falling at your feet

The never ending echo
of the beating and the pound
When a heart breaks alone
does it make a sound?

Can't they see I'm hiding
I don't hear a word they say
They just keep talking
and laughing
and acting like
I'm ok
They don't hear the noise I hear
but it's always around
When a heart breaks alone
does it make a sound?

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katahdin
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1 posted 2014-12-19 02:42 AM


yes but only to the broken-hearted.Nicely done.
Kat >^..^<

secondhanddreampoet
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2 posted 2014-12-19 10:14 AM


great line and grand question indeed:

"when a heart breaks alone
  does it make a sound?"

well said!

RedStoneEB
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since 2003-06-08
Posts 772
uk
3 posted 2014-12-19 02:44 PM


hearts break so easily but they seem to endure to break many times over, each shattering a new piece but gaining experience.

nice write.

RS

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21
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4 posted 2014-12-19 04:39 PM



redwriter1, I really liked this.I am sure I  had it happen but was so busy I never seemed to find the time to notice. Now all these years later I wonder how I carried on at times.
Best to you.
Jo Perry  

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2014-12-19 06:12 PM


Very lyrical. I like this very much.
Great stimulator for the lonely.

true love never looks after it's own interests

redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 480
Franklin, TN
6 posted 2014-12-19 06:18 PM


Thanks guys, I'm glad you think it is lyrical, because I actually did make this into a song. (smile)

Kay-lynn
"When you help someone across the river, you get there yourself"


latearrival
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7 posted 2014-12-19 09:56 PM


good work  jo
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
8 posted 2014-12-19 11:01 PM


Rather like the falling tree in the forest....


Yes...very lyrical!


s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
9 posted 2014-12-21 10:12 PM


When the heart breaks alone it does indeed make a sound- a beautiful sound...it continues to beat. I love the idea behind this. Enjoyed.

-Trina
...because the most powerful words in your life are "I might be wrong"...

Marchmadness
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10 posted 2014-12-25 03:08 PM


nice writing, redwriter1.
                   Ida

redwriter1
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Posts 480
Franklin, TN
11 posted 2017-12-22 08:21 PM


I miss this group. Are you all still here? I'm having trouble finding all my previous posts. and MERRY CHRISTMAS!
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