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When a Heart Breaks Alone
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When a Heart Breaks Alone |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN 
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Remember the first time you fell? There was noone in sight nobody to tell you could feel your heart hit the ground but when a heart breaks alone does it make a sound? Like the sound of crying babys sobbing themselves to sleep Like the weight of the world falling at your feet The never ending echo of the beating and the pound When a heart breaks alone does it make a sound? Can't they see I'm hiding I don't hear a word they say They just keep talking and laughing and acting like I'm ok They don't hear the noise I hear but it's always around When a heart breaks alone does it make a sound? |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
yes but only to the broken-hearted.Nicely done. Kat >^..^< |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
great line and grand question indeed: "when a heart breaks alone does it make a sound?" well said! |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
hearts break so easily but they seem to endure to break many times over, each shattering a new piece but gaining experience. nice write. RS |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
redwriter1, I really liked this.I am sure I had it happen but was so busy I never seemed to find the time to notice. Now all these years later I wonder how I carried on at times. Best to you. Jo Perry |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very lyrical. I like this very much. Great stimulator for the lonely. true love never looks after it's own interests |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Thanks guys, I'm glad you think it is lyrical, because I actually did make this into a song. (smile) Kay-lynn |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
good work jo |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Rather like the falling tree in the forest.... Yes...very lyrical! |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
When the heart breaks alone it does indeed make a sound- a beautiful sound...it continues to beat. I love the idea behind this. Enjoyed. -Trina |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
nice writing, redwriter1. Ida |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
I miss this group. Are you all still here? I'm having trouble finding all my previous posts. and MERRY CHRISTMAS! |
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