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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

0 posted 2014-12-12 08:15 AM

The words which we say too fast,
the feelings that we do not know,
and which dig valleys,
the madness to like unknown eyes,
the one of the birds which don't know how to sing, the first names from which we cannot part,
any met face,
the words which we say too fast,
any met face,
all that we repeat without love,
any met face,
make from our lives castles of paper ......

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2014-12-12 12:33 PM

Oh, dear Yann, but the breeze of folly that plays with those paper castles is worth the watch I think!

Discernment takes time and not always we want to engage in such analysis. We live the moment and sometimes we develop it into fantasies that will never realize, but what amazing work for our synapses

. We just need to be careful when we touch ground again.

You stirred my thoughts with this poem and that means it is very good!

Love,
Margherita

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2014-12-14 12:58 PM

Paper castles. Yes, I've made a few of those myself. Very thought provoking poem, yann.
Ida

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

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a 'Universalist' !

3 posted 2014-12-14 05:22 PM

what an especially powerful and fine ending line !!

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

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Spring, Texas

4 posted 2014-12-14 07:08 PM

well done! my friend... enjoyed reading this.

j.

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

5 posted 2014-12-15 02:25 AM

thanks Margherita for the very kind words, i read them with attention and was thrilled

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

6 posted 2014-12-15 02:26 AM

thanks Ida, this is a comforting comment

yann

2islander2
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by the sea

7 posted 2014-12-15 02:27 AM

thanks secondhandreamer, i didn't use the same words in french, and while writing inspiration came to me for that paper castles

2islander2
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by the sea

8 posted 2014-12-15 02:28 AM

thanks jwesley, enjoyed your comment too

yann

RedStoneEB
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since 2003-06-08

Posts 772
uk

9 posted 2014-12-23 03:17 PM

i'm not sure how the writer sees their words bút as a reader i see it as something like a fragile life we build grand things on unstable foundations, life is unstable, but we do a very good job at repairing the boat cos there really isn't any long term replacement parts, so we come sailing out the sea like some old battered wreck with still alittle fight left in us.

thanks for stirring the memories.

RS

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

10 posted 2014-12-25 04:28 AM

thanks redstone, i couldn't guess this little poem would have such an impact on memories, o loves ot and the words you share about instability, this has impact on me too, thanks for commenting

yann

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