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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia 
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. Skyblue walls and yellow curtains Glowing clouds outside the window Skies on fire - it’s my place Now I live in Hell One day you have told it’s certain You will stay with me forever Anytime, in any space Guess how deep I fell All my things remain in chaos All my words - far from the purpose All devices in my flat Show different time Do you like my pretty house Will you share with me my madness Would you choose to watch the set Through the window rime If you want to be my promised We will live in here together Maybe find it not so bad Even have some fun In the coldest, in the warmest In the best realm of ever With the aimed at my head Barrel of a gun Here I am with all my keenness Shouting, swearing, loving, laughing Working hard, forgetting sleep Crying for the real Of the suffering of sinners Heat is born in this reactor And somebody has to weep Tears onto the wheel Someone must produce the power To supply The Garden of Eden To protect the godly world From the cosmic frost Good would die within an hour If not being compared to Evil Pain is always to be sold At the greatest cost Won’t you leave me Are you ready To exchange your golden palace For a cell amidst the sleet For my timid kiss Let’em fly and keep them steady They are saint, but I’m not jealous Here we’re allowed to eat Candies after six . 16/10/2014 . |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Superb writing, Gale. This poem has a "zing" in each and every line. I was spellbound, and that doesn't happen to me often. We read so many poems, that if we are not careful they lose their meanings. This sad poem has just made my day. Thank you for that. If they give you ruled paper write sideways. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is exceptional writing, captivating like an encrypted mirror of your soul. Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Jerry, Margherita, thank you for such warm comments! I'm touched deeply. Excuse me that I couldn't reply earlier. I've been "working hard" and couldn't gather my wits ) |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
They're right, this is captivating. I'm not really a fan of long winding writing, but this held my attention. Enjoyed. |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Thank you, Trina, for reading and for the comment ) Much appreciated! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I felt, with you, every word, image and pain of this sad, but exquisite poem, Galina. Owl |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Thank you, Diana, for reading and for your full of sympathy comment! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
How anyone could not want to stay with you beats me my friend. Like everyone who posted before me --- this was excellent. very much enjoyed reading... j. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I thought it was great too. Your wording was complex without being confusing. Good job!! Lori  |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Thank you very much, Jim and Lori! |
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