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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I wish I'd let her go outside to the shed to hide inside; instead she died undignified putting on a show. The cat? Well cats are different. Not quite trained obedient, she cried to say goodbye; and I just opened up the door. My people...they just sneaked away: "Oh sure, it's just another day" until we found them where they splayed themselves with props of everyday-- a bag of trash, a lawn mower, a drink, a cigarette, a door things of habit out of place-- human beings die that way, as if they really wanted more... feigning fight and surety eyes opened and too welcoming for me to ever quite believe they fought this thing that they received: a friend they always called a foe. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Awsome stuff my dear. You made me contemplate form a different perspective...I love it when that happens. Lori  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Had to read it three times. Third time is the charm. Truly. You bring such a tantalizing surrealism to the table when you address certain things most people just close their eyes to. You are very, very good at opening people's eyes, Karen. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ [This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (05-11-2012 10:04 AM).] |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
BRAVO!!! Wonderful writing and a pleasure to read...*HUGS* |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"things of habit out of place-- human beings die that way," Sad but true for those that can tie their shoes but are too lazy to bend over and do it. Wonderful word etchings on the mind of the reader. Death the enemy, leaves a lot out of place in some cases doesn't it. Love this title and the implications in the verses. Don't quite know who you're writing about in the last lines but whoever they are they sound as shallow as a politician with a minister on his arm. Love this stuff that cascades out of you. You confused old Eric a little when you said earlier that most of what you post is a rewrite and I thought you meant it was already posted here. Be patient, I'm not the brightest light in the sky....... Roll'em out there and I'll read'em. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hell Eric, I'm not going to pretend I know a bunch of stuff. I just wrote a poem and all I have for inspiration is the stuff in my head--my memories. I'll just thank you all for reading and be quiet again. I appreciate you guys very much--just know that, k?  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Please don't be quiet again. Please don't be hurt over the little conflict you had on your other post. We appreciate your writing very much. It's the perfect earthy mystique we all need to reflect on the ups and downs of life. Don't be hurt there's no need, don't turtle with all that poignant grace you can exude. You know the others here feel the same. The poetry world is a much nicer place with you in it!! I know I joke around too much but I'm trying enjoy the romance of life so never take me too serious. It's always meant to see the lighter side. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 Just tired, boo. I'm fine. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Karen you are the heart of PIP ., |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I agree with Jo, Karen and this poem proves the point. Please stay just the way you are. Ida |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Impressive, dear Karen! M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
I'd call the waaaambulance but you would flip me off so I will just say cool spill K.. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Yes, we do.  |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I really like this -Juju |
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