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Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2012-05-09 09:25 AM

Broken in spirit the ship sailed
Alone in waters deep
Looking for the safety of
A harbor place to sleep
Spied in the distance a haven,
A bay of soothing balm
Beckoning sands dotted
With gentle swaying palm
Memories of harbors past
With hidden cutting reef
Lessons learned to avoid
Hidden dangers underneath
The ship pauses for a moment
Seeking dangers in the bay
Afraid to take a risk again
She slowly sails away.

Note: this is the first poem I've written in a LONG time. Not sure if that's rust on my pen or blood from holding it so tight!

darkclown
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since 2012-05-09

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State of Dark

1 posted 2012-05-09 09:36 AM

This is dark. That's why I am here. A ship, with safe harbor in sight, steers clear of it because of the possibility of the danger which lies beneath the surface of the sea. I'm guessing that before the ship finds another safe harbor a hurricane capsizes the ship and everyone drowns.

Hell is empty and all the devils are here.

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2012-05-09 09:40 AM

I could hear the creaking of her as she paused, considered and changed course.

And understood.

It's lovely to read you again my old friend.

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

3 posted 2012-05-09 12:53 PM

Let's hope you cannot forsee the future darkclown as I currently live in Floriday -home of the hurricane.

But you're right about the assessment. For this task, others used the word haven as a 'safe place'. I chose, in my usual way, to be contrary. Something may LOOK safe but is it?
Thank you for your reply.

Karen, it's nice to see you...how've you been? Weathering the storms of life still?

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2012-05-09 02:16 PM

Don't ask me how I am--I just might tell you!

It's just good to see you sailing on the blue sea here again, m'friend. And yes, I owe you a ketchup letter. MUAHZ...my Haven of a friend.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

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New Brunswick Canada

5 posted 2012-05-09 02:39 PM

Wonderful inspire to insight here done in such a clever metaphorical fashion.
Love those comparisons in poetic language.
Long time since I read any of your work.
Well done!!

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

Startime1955
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since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

6 posted 2012-05-09 07:30 PM

Great to read your inspired work again...one never really knows if the harbour is really safe...life can be so unpredictable...*HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Michael

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California

7 posted 2012-05-10 01:49 PM

Your pen is still magic, Sharon. This nearly prompted me to sit down and give you another poetic reply. I still might if time permits. There is safe harbor, dear friend, though I can certainly relate to the reservation one feels even looking with all that Anguish and Grief like to ravage the open seas these days. Don't be a ghost on the Misery ship, though... you only get there by choice, and choosing to give up is NEVER the answer.

Hope to see more from you soon.

Michael

Nan

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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

8 posted 2012-05-10 05:48 PM

Hoist those mainsaila, PdV.. It's great to see you out on the open seas again..

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

9 posted 2012-06-04 01:43 PM

A poem from you is worth waiting for... however long the wait!! And this is fantastic... sometimes we just can't face the possibility of another rip in our hull... no matter how inviting the smooth sand looks. *S*

luminosity
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10 posted 2012-06-26 02:24 PM

wow...I know the feeling of not writing, I write very littel these days, but this is wonderful, enjoyed very much

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2012-07-07 08:37 PM

Very nice...James

Alison

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12 posted 2012-07-09 12:32 PM

I enjoyed this.

Alison

Marilyn
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Ontario, Canada

13 posted 2012-07-13 12:58 PM

Good to read you PDV. Stay far far away it isn't safe...believe me I know.

secondhanddreampoet
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14 posted 2012-07-13 11:08 PM

fine writing ... LOVE the ending !!

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

15 posted 2012-07-14 09:33 AM

good to read you again

I, for some odd reason, bought the season 1 of Haven and watched it just before reading this. I just hope  your town in Florida is more safe and secure than that town up north.

We have had a share of storms in the area this season  so I know what you are going through.

Hope  all is well both in health and in your life.

M (p.s. I am having trouble writing lately myself...thinking it's a lack of inspiration)

ebonygirl
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California U.S.A

16 posted 2012-07-14 10:31 AM

Enjoyed the un-safe haven.
Ms. E

JerryPat2
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South Louisiana

17 posted 2012-07-14 10:47 AM

Wonderful poetry and it gives out a doleful bit of sage advice as the ship veers away from the seemingly safe harbor. Love this. Your Muse has dried the blood, wiped off the rust, and gave you a gentle head pat and told you that you were back.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

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