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ponderthepoetorrsx
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since 2011-06-25

Posts 284
U.S , Ca

0 posted 2012-05-01 07:04 PM

tick tock
drip drop

silent sighs

how many have i written?
and better yet not given?

tick tock goes the clock

hours spent

drip drop

perennial tears so wet

click clack
keyboard strokes
even as you read.

skkkk skkkk
pen against paper

drip drop
tears falling
blotches forming
deforming heartfelt words
tick tock
another minute gone
without you here

a sigh

i love you
don't you know?

yolilitzli (a word meaning life, my names richard by the way)

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-05-01 07:08 PM

Okay, now I'm worried.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Startime1955
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since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

2 posted 2012-05-01 07:16 PM

tears fell as I read this...My heart goes out to you...*HUGS*

ponderthepoetorrsx
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Posts 284
U.S , Ca

3 posted 2012-05-01 08:31 PM

nah don't worry jerry im having a rather bland day actually (= though i the poem is heartfelt indeed

yolilitzli (a word meaning life, my names richard by the way)

JerryPat2
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4 posted 2012-05-01 09:02 PM

I'm sorry, yolilitzli, I was very weary when I read your poem and I think the title was what made me say what I did. After I went back and really read it, I can see the pain and grief there, sorry, Buddy, didn't mean for an insult.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

ponderthepoetorrsx
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U.S , Ca

5 posted 2012-05-01 09:28 PM

ididnt take it that way i just thought you were worried

yolilitzli (a word meaning life, my names richard by the way)

JerryPat2
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South Louisiana

6 posted 2012-05-01 09:31 PM

I was, because of the title and some of the things said in the poem. Again, sorry. Let's carry on . . .

ponderthepoetorrsx
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since 2011-06-25

Posts 284
U.S , Ca

7 posted 2012-05-01 09:55 PM

don't fret or sweat it by the way i enjoy your poetry and just to make a slight correction my name is richard good sir

Elric
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since 2010-08-24

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southbend, WA

8 posted 2012-05-01 10:43 PM

I really really enjoyed this poem, it is wonderful.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

9 posted 2012-05-01 11:54 PM

Good write Richard.
I like the format and delivery as it makes the subject more absorbing.

The ending lines are just right!

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

ponderthepoetorrsx
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U.S , Ca

10 posted 2012-05-02 09:05 AM

thanks

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