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Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

0 posted 2012-04-30 02:54 PM

Broken Promise

They say it will happen
I watch dark clouds forming
Smell ozone in the air
The wind is picking up

My daughter calls “it’s here”
“it’s moving east to you”
“get ready, you’ll love it”
“it’s just what you wished for”

Excitement flows through me
The rain begins to fall
A flash lights up the sky
Counting one one thousand…

My heart begins to pound
Come closer I beseech
I strain to see and hear
Please let it come to me

A tear rolls down my cheek
Storm’s tracing the river
Weather people hear me
It’s a broken promise

Karen Mc Neil
April 30, 2012

*may our dreams ever be magical*

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-04-30 03:30 PM

When I don't "get" something I am not bashful in saying so. I don't "get" this.

Are you wishing for a storm, and it didn't come your way? And if you are wishing for a storm, why?

Or is this just poking fun at the "weather people," and all their broken promises?

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

2 posted 2012-04-30 03:36 PM

*grin* sorry to confuse you...I am wishing for a thunder and lightning storm...they are always coming but they seem to follow the river bottom and just miss us...I get very disappointed when the weather people say we will get one and we miss out...I guess that is pretty strange...

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2012-04-30 03:42 PM

Haha!! Well if you like thunder and lightning storms, Karen, it isn't strange. Thanks for cluing me in. I have some powerful voodoo tricks (I do live voodoo country you know) and I will conjure up some action for you within a few days. Heehee

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

4 posted 2012-04-30 04:08 PM

LOL...Wonderful...just don't let it follow the river...*grin*

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

5 posted 2012-05-01 02:45 AM

I understand the feel for thunder and lightning.
Enjoyed your poem,
ms. e

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2012-05-01 02:52 AM

Like Jerry I didn't understand at first.

I thought you were waiting for the guy that was delivering some moonshine to
you guys out west there......smile...

You crazy cowgirls and cowboys just like you to want a lightning bolt in the front yard.

I hope it doesn't sizzle your petticoats when you finally get your wish.

JUs kiddin Karen, it's a lovely poem.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

MICHELMAS
Member

since 2012-02-15

Posts 305
Lancashire England

7 posted 2012-05-01 04:12 AM

I love the approaching storm, when you can stand in an open field (not sensible mind you)and feel the hairs on the back of your neck rise from the static in the air.

Perhaps you should chase the storm

enjoyed
Michael

Eloise
Senior Member

since 1999-11-27

Posts 1096
Wyoming

8 posted 2012-05-01 12:57 PM

I was a bit confused at first too. But after you walked us through it I enjoyed your poem. We get that a lot here as well. Always waiting, but doesn't happen. Thanks for sharing.

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

9 posted 2012-05-01 03:20 PM

I got it right off, probably because I love me a good rip-roarer or two myself (if I'm safe inside, that is!)

The title clues the reader in. Lovely write, I truly enjoyed!

Amaryllis

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

10 posted 2012-05-02 09:14 AM

Storms can be rather invigorating and exciting to watch as long as they are not too long or distructive.
Ida

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

11 posted 2012-05-02 09:43 AM

Thank you all for reading this poem and commenting...there is just something about storms that excites me...the power in them that man cannot control is amazing...I get lost in a different world during a storm...

rabittlover
Junior Member

since 2012-04-07

Posts 46

12 posted 2012-05-05 04:32 PM

Delightful poem.
I like the storms too--except when they knock down trees on things I own. Yes, those things are insured, but it's a still a nuisance.

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