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Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

0 posted 2012-04-24 01:49 PM

.

and she's
all of that.

Hair a bright flash,
waist a willow whip
and yes, a magnet.

We drive to the mall.
I don't wear heels-
there's always so much walking.

Rifling through the froth of
rightnow rightnow
there is a moment

pressed between the strobing glare,
the clearance rack
and noise

I see her catch
a quarter-view

of the
almost-woman

caught within
the mirrored walls...

a thousand points
of possibility:

      blonde

               and blonde

                          and blonde
.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-04-24 01:57 PM

Haha! I hear ya, Amaryllis, and in my minds eyes I see her in all of her fourteen-year-old glory.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20

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2 posted 2012-04-24 01:59 PM

Thanks Jerry...yeah, the mall...what an ordeal! :p lol

JerryPat2
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3 posted 2012-04-24 02:35 PM

Hah! I can imagine . . .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Startime1955
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since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

4 posted 2012-04-24 02:42 PM

Boy...do I know how you feel...don't you just love her...

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2012-04-25 08:23 AM

I am intolerant of malls and having made quite the amount of efforts to please my daughter, I SO understand this, dear Amaryllis. But teenagers are drawn to the immense choice, though they almost always know exactly what they want ... there is an air of glittering world in there and it's crowded, makes them feel "in the world" somehow.

As always your poem is of excellent quality and strong impact!

Love,
Margherita

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2012-04-25 11:53 AM

I do believe I will send this to my eldest granddaughter...and her daughter...who is but a babe, but oh so poignant for the new mom, who will know it so well in only a blink!

dreamgal
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since 2011-03-17

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7 posted 2012-04-25 03:43 PM

Reminds me of a certain someone *ahem* back in the day HA! You are spot on loved it!

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

8 posted 2012-04-25 04:54 PM

.

This is actually very good
I had to slow down in a second read
to appreciate it

Again
very good

John

.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

9 posted 2012-04-25 05:31 PM

Yep, what can I write to improve on those images....Nothing!
Had one of those, who's just a mere 37 years old now, and even as the male in the family I know where you're coming from.

Enjoyed very much.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

10 posted 2012-04-25 09:52 PM

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Startime, thank you, and yes- I wouldn't change a hair on her precious head!

Thank you, Margherita...yes you've described it...and I want to remember to be thankful for these times when she still wants mom along..

Sunshine, thank you, I am pleased you've shared it, something all mothers of daughters can relate to at some point

Dreamgal, lol...yes, it was moi too once upon a million years ago-! Now? I'm with Margherita...can barely tolerate. But for her...I will...

John, thank you so much...I'm glad you slowed to read it a 2nd time...was trying to speak to that ephemeral 'between' time...I know how fleeting.

Thanks, Eric, yes...not only mothers, but any parent

Thanks all, for looking in...
Best,
Amaryllis
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ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

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California U.S.A

11 posted 2012-04-26 11:56 PM

Love to read poems about moms and their daughters.
Smiles, enjoyed, ms. e

Amaryllis
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Mi now

12 posted 2012-04-27 12:26 PM

Many thanks, ms E

Best,
A

MICHELMAS
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since 2012-02-15

Posts 305
Lancashire England

13 posted 2012-04-27 10:43 AM

enjoyed
14 year old blondes, become mothers, become grandmothers, and always they are 'all that'

Michael

ponderthepoetorrsx
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U.S , Ca

14 posted 2012-04-27 10:45 AM

oh no the amll haha enjoyed it good work

Amaryllis
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15 posted 2012-04-27 04:08 PM

Thank you, Michael and ponder, for looking in!

Best,
Amaryllis

luminosity
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since 2005-11-18

Posts 813

16 posted 2012-05-02 02:20 PM

very good indeed, much enjoyed

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