Open Poetry #48 |
laughing down the thrill |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I walked the rails barefoot wide-legged straddling my legs denied the slats of one train on her way. I walked the rails with no shoes on and never looked ahead. I walked the levee dreaming of things that kids do-- this-n-that of what it might be like alone of what it might be like to catch a freight train just like Woody did I thought of things like that and dreamed of being Bobby Dylan cracked with a Harmony and strap singing Joan's injustices wishing that I could be mad and graceful all at once... with that angelic beckoning... I wanted to be all of them; my-guitar-strapped-cross-my-back staring at the slow train, come before my toes would jump the rails excited that I felt the train rumbling through my spine's refrain singing through my feet, insane oh-damn-I-may-have-lost-some-stringx off my guitar in tumbling laughing down the thrill. I thought: "It must have been something like that..." as I counted my tres strings faking them in tune and me walking with my Harmony rightback up the levee green to sing something to fake a tune sans a string or two. Or three... straddling the rails. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I caught that train for you, Karen. Quite a few of them in fact. Always wound back up where I started from with no outward progress. But then, I wasn't singing Guthrie, Dylan and Baez, my song was "Ramblin' Man," by Hank. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
don't ya miss the trains? I was just a kid, and yeah, I had romantic ideas. I wish I still felt that free, though, I truly do. Thanks for popping in, and smile..I KNOW you're not gonna tell me that you never sang, "This Train (is bound for Glory"... smile I know you have. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: I followed in your footsteps while reading and I felt your emotions. This is so vivid and impressive. Great performance. Love, Margherita |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yes, Karen,I most certainly did sing that song, but there was a difference between you and I, and it has to do with the time period. And circumstances. I just wanted to leave Taylor, Arkansas and never, ever come back. I did leave, but I always came back and that has been my shame. It has been many, many year though since I have see the city limits of Taylor. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A. you should write about that. B. "This Train" is due for a comeback. Mergherita? I thank you ao muxh. And it looks like the sun is coming up again...off to the crypt, I creep *hugs* |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Oh,I did write about it,Karen. The name of the book is, "Misdemeanors and Felonies: A Memoir," and it is available at the bottom of the page here . . . http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/fauxcajun?searchTerms=&pageOffset=5 ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
Yes ... memories flow back and make me appreciate the trains as they move through this town... |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
I love this.I could see you so innocent stepping on those rails,Singing along like woody Guthrie. I have never wished for that life although I sometimes envied the hoboes. I just wanted to travel by thumb like my brothers did but I was never old enough or free enough in spirit to do it.One day my brother who is three years younger insisted we hitchhike home from the beach. I said "no!",in my unathorative 13 year old voice. I was responsible for him.But he put out his thumb and climbed into the back seat of a car that stopped and I had to get in with him. I was not a happy little girl that day. jo |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This took me back to a time when I was young and foolish and did hop the odd train or two with my cousin. I miss those times, they were the best. Great memories K. Thanks for reminding me of a much simpler time, when no worry or cares. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Tender, nostalgic write...I love this, very much enjoyed! Amaryllis |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Oh it is... a thrill in the words of this poem. Slidin' on time-blood that made the tracks slick; Woody long gone, but still she sings-- His, are her songs now--she plays In free verse, A, and E minor chords--painted signs That prove the train he rode had passed that way. By time, she binds with glory, Word drivers rolling into the night; She hitches a westward ride With Bobbie--Harmony and strap Fueling the engine of your rhyme. Wind carries memories, dreams And broken plans..The fog is plain; Its Joanies voice, in air never cleared Of sounds of whips that crack, and lash The backs of those that pray for justice. Ignoring the foul songs the world still sings, Yet she continues "to sing something to fake a tune sans a string or two. Or three... straddling the rails" Even with a string or two missing, and maybe a couple out of tune.. I really enjoyed this poem...loved it! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Just for the record, I never hopped ON a train, although my dream vacation (which remains a broken promise from my husband) is to ride The City of New Orleans from here to Chicago to attend The Chicago Blues Fest. I just spent a lot of time alone, walking a nearby freight track, and thought a lot about the history of the political/folk musicians who did seem to pack of a lot living and life into their music, influencing politics and changing history utilizing nothing but guitars, harmonicas, their passions, and their brains. Hmmm. *chuckle* Maybe I should reconsider returning to college and pick up an old guitar? Love you guys and gals! Thanks for reading. But? NOT GONNA HOP A TRAIN. I'v fallen down enough. Thanks for reading. <--I can't actually "bounce" either. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice to read...they are going to build a rail in Hawaii, perhaps I will be riding the rails in the future...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
My God Celeste you're drifting back in this one. All the way through Woody Guthrie, Bob Dylan and Joan Baez. All that with the old Harmony guitar straped to your back. I had one, blond finish and acoustic arch top hollow body and I could hardly push the strings down but I learned. Great stuff my dear, I loved walking those rails too....Nice memories to say the least. Glad you jumped off the rails so you could write this American culture reflection. You da gal! Way down on the levy in old Alabamy There's Daddy and Mammy There's Ephraim and Sammy On a moonlight night you can find them all While they are waiting, The banjos are syncopating What's that they're saying? What's that they're saying? While they keep playing A - humming and swaying It's the good ship Robert E. Lee that's come to carry the cotton away! Watch them shuffling along, See them shuffling along! Go take your best gal, real pal Go down to the levy, I said to the levy, and join that shuffling throng Hear that music and song! It's simply great, mate, waiting on the levy Waiting for the Robert E. Lee! The whistles are blowing, the smokestacks are showing the ropes they are throwing, excuse me I'm going to the place where all is harmonious even the preacher, he is the dancing teacher! Have you been down there? Were you around there? If you ever go there you'll always be found there, why, dog-gone, here comes my baby on the good old Robert E. Lee! Watch them shuffling along, See them shuffling along Go take your best gal, real pal Go down to the levy, I said to the levy, And join that shuffling throng Hear that music and song! It's simply great, mate, waiting on the levy Waiting for the Robert E. Lee! Some old old American folk song culture, sorry I got carried away.....smile.. Oh, by the way, I enjoyed this.... Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I find my self relating to this poem. Lovely write. Juju -Juju |
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