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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2012-04-20 05:41 AM

in the town square
homage of innocents
in little pink dresses
the order of the day
the sky is upside down
the ribs of heaven
are cotton candy sweet
every eye is filmy flesh
speculative innocent 1950s
smiles the order of the day
a low-sung red convertible
cruising Main Street cool
waiting for Elvis to show
in glorious days of youth
naive to the nth, but cool
an innocent begins to cry
she's been a naughty girl
take her pink dress away

©April 4, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2012-04-20 07:08 AM

Those last three lines are an in depth poem by themselves, but I appreciate the subtle foreshadow that led me there.

the ending, for me, shook me.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-04-20 07:11 AM

Actually, the ending shook me also, Karen, I didn't see it coming. I just love it when things like that happens. Thank you for your time spent in the town square.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2012-04-20 07:22 AM

Nodding with smiles. Although it's sometimes disturbing, I love when my fingers take over my brain like that.

It's excellent, Jer, truly.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2012-04-20 08:04 AM

Wondered if they took her pink dress and gave her a red one instead (wink)

Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

5 posted 2012-04-20 08:07 AM

Now look who's being naughty, Lori. Heh-Heh. I have a feeling something on that order might have transpired. Thanks for pointing it out.

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MICHELMAS
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since 2012-02-15

Posts 305
Lancashire England

6 posted 2012-04-20 08:50 AM

and matching bobby socks I presume

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

7 posted 2012-04-20 08:52 AM

You betcha, Michael. Thanks for your input.

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