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I Miss You
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I Miss You |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
I Miss You I miss that sweetness of your fragrance, and your delightful charm. I miss you reaching out to hold me, as we would walk hand-in-hand, or arm-in-arm… I miss your enticing smile, those little verbal slips, and especially your pouting bottom lip. I miss that treasure of knowing you, and the inviting pleasure of holding you… I miss you standing at my door, me unseen, watching you. And when our eyes would finally meet, I miss the way you would then say, ‘I can’t help it – I love you.’ Born to be an Irish rose, a sweet melody of Ireland. Your voice would blend as a cool washed spring, and I miss the adoring sound of you… I miss all that we had, and so much more, that which I, even now, cannot seem to say. I miss your love, that cozy-warm love lost, our true, true love of days past, barely a moment of days. Now, in this winter of my living, I am without you. I miss you so much. All that I have is that gravestone A cold tear stained lifeless stone, which has become a part of me, and now a part of you – When I think of you… When I think of you, my sweet Irish rose. Oh, how I miss you... . . . Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Sad, JL, but with enough of the true feelings you shared with her to give it an underlying happiness throughout the poem. Very well-written is this deeply moving tribute to her. ~*~ I gave up feeling guilty just to survive a long time ago ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
oh JL you got mr bawling like a baby, that is so precious.  Lori |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
JL, you know I love ya hun, and it makes me so sad for you to read this...can feel the pain of regret and loss....and no one will ever replace her...ever...she remains in your memory keeping her alive...remember always the joy you shared... big hugs Lee J. |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
heartbreaking, JL~*~ ~write-on~ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh dear JL what a loving, heartbreaking & heartfelt piece - felt the longing & the loss in this. floating winged ~hugs~ your way Love is the life of the soul... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully penned JL, with such longing tied to the memories. It must have been a wonderful bond you shared. You captured it wonderfully. Much enjoyed.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
A lovely poem from the heart, JL. Ida |
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The_Doctors_Angel_32 Member
since 2011-01-14
Posts 337Florida, USA |
This is a very beautifully written piece. Very heartbreaking!!! I truly enjoyed the read!!! When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Oh JL... how could I possibly come up with something to say to this? Words are sometimes flat, feeble little things, when they're wrapped around emotions as large as this. |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
JL, To have experienced a great love, a true love, in your life, must have been the most wonderful blessing. I too am saddened by your loss. Ms. E |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
My kind of writing my friend...very well done. j. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is so very loving and full of longing... simply gorgeous!!! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thanks all!! This is poetry, not a real life event. A story gleaned from life. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Oh thank you that this is not real about you. I was broken hearted, honest and truly. I don't always read the responses, but am so happy that I scrolled down to yours. See, that is what you do to us when you write like this. I told you that you write special heart wrenching poetry. And, again, I was right. Right? This is poignant and so beautiful. Alison |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thank you Ms. Alison! So sweet! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing of longing and missing someone we care for...James |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very beautiful in its melancholy. Margherita |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
you know, JL, I try to remember to put the disclaimer "not about me" at the bottom of many a piece because I found out if you write, especially sad things, then it must be about yourself --- and so much of writing, to me, is about what you see, hear, feel around you, even if it's written first person, which much has to be to come across correctly, and not necessarily about yourself. That's not to belittle actual first person writing in any way - my heart to all that live the write. That said ... yep, sure happy it's NOT about you...(grin!) Again, much enjoyed the read. j. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
JL... I can think of so many people I wish I could send this too... so you'll have to suffice for me putting it in a safe place in my library...  Thank you for this. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thank you, James! ----------------------- Margherita, thank you, dear lady! --------------------------- Mr. J. Yep, and yep… Thank you sir. ------------------------------ Thank you Sunshine, I am smiling!! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
you write the missing well... I got caught up in the imagery of this... beautiful and heartfelt longing |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thank you, Tracey. I do appreciate your words. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Ron63 Junior Member
since 2012-03-18
Posts 49Suffolk, Eng, UK |
After reading this poem I was about to send a heartfelt response, but having read some the other responses I found it wasn't a genuine event in your life. My reaction to that is, congratulations, it was such a convincing read, and I applaud it. Great poem. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thank you so much, Ron63. I'm easily inspired by almost any source. I'm not sure where this one came from, could have been a movie, a song, or something I read. But, to make it real enough to get even the slightest response, reflex, is what keeps me on my toes when writing. Again, thanks. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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byski Member
since 2006-01-26
Posts 235Alberta, Canada |
The first thing that popped into my head reading this was 'this guy is too cute'. Loved this read, made me smile from ear to ear. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Well, byski, this is written about a woman, not a guy. But I am happy you are smiling, thanks JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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byski Member
since 2006-01-26
Posts 235Alberta, Canada |
Nonono, I mean you are too cute. Us big tough men can be cute too can we not? |
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byski Member
since 2006-01-26
Posts 235Alberta, Canada |
Don't get me wrong, it is very touching and very sad and I am lucky enough to not know of the pain you speak of. I am just saying that the love you put on display here is one that makes me smile. A big smile. A love deserving of such a shrine open to this adoring public. |
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