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Spoil It All
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Spoil It All |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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I know I'm next in line but you never have the time to give a reason to me And if I take a tougher stance I know that there's a chance you'll be leaving me. But then there's days we meet in a quiet little space And our love shines through. Then we compete with know it all And say someting we don't mean And spoil it all. I can see you realize We need to spend the time to make a treaty out of truth And though it's really real to you It hurts me too That our love is hidden out of use. So I'm thinking every day I need to find a way To make the future shine through But I always seem to wait until the time is too late when the words have no mood When the time is right And there's tender words you've said The ideas fill my head and the moment seems so true then we compete with know it all And say something we don't mean And spoil it all Yet you love me and I love you true love never looks after it's own interests |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
This is such a truism, Eric. Why do we have to make love so very difficult? I am probably the worlds worst at doing that. I try not to, but somehow, as you said in this excellent poem, I always manage to screw things up. Good work. Great reading you again! ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I really love this poem -Juju |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
If love don't make you open your mouth and insert your foot I don't know what will. If we are lucky our lover hears with their heart. Great write. Lori  |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
"So I'm thinking every day I need to find a way To make the future shine through But I always seem to wait until the time is too late when the words have no mood" Loved the way you put that! Pure (like most of us) procrastination! Enjoyed the read, my friend. j. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
then we compete with "know it all." What a great line. Ida |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Lori You're right on both counts, foot in the mouth and hear with the heart. Thanks for the visit and the comment. Eric J. Right you are, and I'm the 'I'll try it later king!' Thanks for the read. Eric Hello Ida Long time no contact. Thanks for the comment on that line. Visit much appreciated. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is a wonderful and wise reminder to "count up to ten" before speaking, to preserve love from moments of crisis. Of course I could hear the song. And it's beautiful, really. Margherita |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Margherita Thanks for the visit and for hearing the meaning and the tune. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Its a good thing that love doesn't demand perfection and if it likes you it sticks with you...James |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Relationships are tricky...I love the final line here Amaryllis |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
The music of this poem flows with truth as one tries to keep love alive...I love it... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
James You're so right. Glad you could drop in and read this, thanks. Eric Amaryllis They certainly are tricky but beautiful if they can be worked out. Thanks for the visit. Eric Sometimes the real truth is hard to get out. So glad you saw it this way Startime there's so much to be had when the love surfaces into honesty. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
But then there's days we meet in a quiet little space And our love shines through. And those are the days that keep us muddling through - even when we've made so many wrong turns our apologies sound stale even to ourselves. *S* Beautiful write... it was singing in my head! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Suthern Haven't communicated with you for a long time but when you show up it's always a delight. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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