an exit's grace (for John's stupidity challenge)

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2012-04-14 03:20 AM

His fingers will not interlace

mine

the way that comfort feels

We will not rest
together in
what some call
the sunset years.

I am a being's furrowed brow.

I watch him like a child on skates.

He reads the horoscopes to me;
I analyze the real estate
sections of the newspaper
searching for an exit's grace...

skipping obits lest I face

my life

in someone else's words

the bags beneath a woman's eyes
never could conceal the lies
she kept and held unto her grave...

Sometimes I laugh.
I try to pray.
And both of us
were born this way

Stupid

with naivete'

I was so dumb I called it "faith"--
and vowed that it would stay the same.

He's still a child on roller skates.
Our fingers still won't interlace.

And time will turn our stubborn page
to face the obits'
black and gray

photograph

of just one half

the story of who got away.

JerryPat2
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1 posted 2012-04-14 05:25 AM

The phrase, "quiet desperation" came to mind as I read this generous offering from you in these early morning hours. This self inspection is one of the best I have ever read of yours. No this, you are not alone,there are many who are going through this with you, not that knowing that will make a difference, but it just is.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2012-04-14 05:37 AM

ty Jer, for your quiet understanding, especially since I usually uselessly rage against what is...

I should sleep.

I have to put on man pants sometime tomorrow and service a window unit. (Sounds like more fun than it is...)

*smile*

ice
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3 posted 2012-04-14 05:39 AM

I read poems every morning at five oclock.
And today I found a gem at the top of these blue pages.

And while reading, Simon and Garfunkle were softly singing, about a dangling conversation, in a corner of my mind..

"And you read your Emily Dickinson,
And I my Robert Frost,
And we note our place with bookmarkers
That measure what we've lost."

And, although the theme is disturbing, at the end I had to applaude.

"Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance."
Carl Sandburg

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2012-04-14 05:49 AM

Simon & Garfunkel is about as sentimental as I get regarding two sad kids who held hands and jumped...
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TEwQ0iTHD-8&feature=fvst

Bookends..sigh. I was trying for Bookends...

The shortest most perfect song (second only to Taps) that always makes me cry.

And really, I just GOTTA duck that sun. Ew.

Thank you for reading, lovie.

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2012-04-14 05:52 AM

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5S5V-Y53ad4

curtsy

ice
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6 posted 2012-04-14 07:03 AM

Ah, indeed " bookends" went to the video, tried to sing along, but choked..

I ask emotions:
Sadness, sadness why do you well tears?

And emotion answers:

"Because you are human, be glad in it."

And the words of "The dangling conversation"
Returned again..by my asking...

Go here , dear poet friend, to hear it--
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IdodDEELLDg

jwesley
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7 posted 2012-04-14 10:43 AM

Awesome!

j.

Juju
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8 posted 2012-04-14 10:52 AM

Good poem

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

ebonygirl
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9 posted 2012-04-14 01:21 PM

Ms. Sssssssserenity,
Loved your poem,
Watched the videos you and Ice suggested,
My emotions have been stirred.
Ms. E

serenity blaze
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10 posted 2012-04-14 06:56 PM

Sometimes the hardest part of a relationship is coming to terms with one's own complicity.

Thanks for reading--I ended up someplace quite unexpected, so I appreciate the prompt from Huan Yi, with his challenge.

Ya'll have a nice weekend.

Marchmadness
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11 posted 2012-04-17 03:58 AM

It's kind of debatable which half gets away.
Sad either way, Karen. Great poem.
Ida

ethome
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12 posted 2012-04-17 11:41 AM

skipping obits lest I face

my life

in someone else's words

You too huh?

This theme is very very sad but at the same time compelling reader's attention to the reality.
The closure one never gets over. Sorta like an oxymoron....??

You're still doing so well Celeste.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

serenity blaze
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13 posted 2012-04-17 08:50 PM

ty

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