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An Adjective Poem #3

Ron63
Junior Member

since 2012-03-18

Posts 49
Suffolk, Eng, UK

0 posted 2012-04-11 05:19 AM

This is a revised version of my adjective poem, which now has an element of unpredictibility. Does it read better than version #1

blue
loveless blue
verdant, dull,
Lurid green
ugly orange
stumpy, stringent
scentless red

pleasing pink
wonderstruck
delightful, charitable
exquisite yellow
prevailing purple
enchanting
violet

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

1 posted 2012-04-11 09:48 AM

I favor the first poem, Green... each word used to describe green brought on a wider smile.This poem could easily become two separate poems.
Enjoying your poetry Ron,
Ms. E

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-04-11 09:53 AM

Yup, Ms E., never try to perfect perfection.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

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