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Sun Dogs & Dust Motes
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Sun Dogs & Dust Motes |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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The sun actually heats the dog-kissed/licked frosted front window, catching dust motes suspended from a winter-weary Ficus tree. The dogs sprawl haphazardly on the window sill and across the floor, like jigsaw puzzle pieces, scattered – yet still connected; while the cats languish in the unabashed warmth of sun-lit light beams. Outside, the snow is littered with a fiesta of dog toys. A rainbow of purple, green, yellow and blue deformed Teddy bears loyally circle a dismembered Pink Flamingo. The empty garden cart lists to one side. Tire still flat. Bed, finally, ice-free and empty of dried firewood and Birch bark. An industrious Wood Pecker precariously clings to the dirty, scarred bark of a Cottonwood tree, punctuating the silence of early morning with its monotonous tattoo. Snow, schizophrenic, glistens like cheap rhinestones on a little girl’s velvet party dress. It is wrapped with a beautiful exterior, but is no longer able to disguise the rotton and dirtied underpinnings that push forth for freedom. Like the wicked witch of the west, it is melting, soon to be only a memory. - Alison |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
WoW! There are so many vibrant and exciting lines inside the structure of this poem that it is mind-bogglingly. From the sun kissing warmth on everything it can touch through the window pane to (one of my best parts) "the rotton / and dirtied underpinnings that push forth for freedom." From wood peckers to teddy bears to pink flamingos, this poem is razor sharp in describing the melting of the snow which changes everything it reaches. I could just gush on and on, because there a richness within this poem that you don't often see. Congratulations! ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Snow, schizophrenic, glistens like cheap rhinestones on a little girl’s velvet party dress. It is wrapped with a beautiful exterior, but is no longer able to disguise the rotton and dirtied underpinnings that push forth for freedom. Like the wicked witch of the west, it is melting, soon to be only a memory. ~*~ Jerry stole my WOW...so I will say thanks for the vivid imagery...and for the every day life you so excellently portray... |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Alison, I feel I know your beloved country, your beloved home in all its nuances and details, and your most beloved animals (and camping trips), from your beautiful, vibrant, 3-dimensional poetry, better than I know my next-door neighbour's garden. Needless to say, I read every Alison poem I come across, and enjoy every single one. They are all gems, and this one is one of the most sparkling. Owl |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
You have great expression and lots of imagination! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I can only echo the 'WOW!!', my friend. Just an awesome piece of writing. One you're going to have trouble ever topping. And with your skill, that's saying a lot. j. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
yes yes yes... I love this. The last stanza is my favorite. The tattoo of the wood pecker is brilliant; and schizophrenic snow...this is definitely one of my favorites of yours. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Great imagery ... fine 'write' ! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
One read will not be enough, dear Alison, for the images and emotions crowd playfully in my mind now. Your pen has vanquished winter. Masterfully so. Love, Margherita |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Jerry may have gotten in the first WOW... but there's a chorus of us singing harmony on that notion! LOL Pour a cup of coffee, please, because I'm THERE... your images are that vivid and enticing!!! Love this... love you! *S* |
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Daddy Goose38 Member
since 2010-09-04
Posts 430obama's a rice paper tiger |
O, spring time in the Arctic, Ali. How you weave a ribbon through it. Good for this loose goose. Jaime |
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Daddy Goose38 Member
since 2010-09-04
Posts 430obama's a rice paper tiger |
You don't want to be here, Ali. It is 85 degrees, and you and the cats and trees and everything would just flash into a cloud of sub-atomic nothingness!!! |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
hello alison, i so love that way of describing your place (i guess it is alaska) with accent about so much details that matter for everyone, this is a vibrant and colored painting and the emotion that spread is infinite,thanks a lot, yann |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Love the way you bring us into your reality in such a beautiful way. Ida |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"Outside, the snow is littered with a fiesta of dog toys. A rainbow of purple, green, yellow and blue deformed Teddy bears loyally circle a dismembered Pink Flamingo." Sounds like some pups were having fun! Love this write, A. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Love the rhinestones and the wicked witch of the west references. Your pictures bring it all alive for me. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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MICHELMAS Member
since 2012-02-15
Posts 305Lancashire England |
what a picture you paint excellent Michael |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow. You certainly know how to paint. This is pure artistry. I can see the underlining clearly bleeding through the, (out with the old, I guess), indefensible snow. They say "change is good" ... you've proven it's even better to capture in a still-frame moment like this. Truly enjoyable. Michael |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
ok, I am smiling a much needed smile, thank you for this incredible vision! for this incredible poetic offering....... |
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