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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2013-03-31 10:17 PM

In the
Grand Scheme
of things
When feeling
like a grain of sand
in the Sahara
Suddenly becoming
an individual
of great distinction
and attention
By being gusted
into an eye
Causing much pain
and discomfort
Wreaking havoc
on that
then and there
Inflicting tears
until found
touched
and removed
Returned to dirt
of insignificance
The sound of grit
beneath a shoe
LGR(C)3/31/13

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2013-04-01 06:13 AM

Oh. This is tough reading.

~*~ I changed my iPod name to Titanic. It's syncing now. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2013-04-01 08:41 AM

I pondered on it later and thought it was a good metaphor for life in general. Being plucked from the Collective Consciousness
and deposited into the skin of life and then coming full circle...dust to dust.
But that wasn't my thinking at the time of the writing.

Thanks for the read,
lori

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2013-04-01 11:47 PM

What a great metaphor.

Excellent writing, Lori~

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2013-04-02 10:01 AM

Enjoyed the read, my friend.

j.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

5 posted 2013-04-02 10:09 AM

Blues, so good to hear from you. Glad you like this piece. Thanks for the comment!

lori

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

6 posted 2013-04-02 10:11 AM

J my friend, happy to hear you enjoyed the read! Thanks for commenting.

lori

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

7 posted 2013-04-02 01:47 PM

I enjoyed your poem and I thought it did make for a very raw and thought provoking metaphor for life and, though I don't think they have oysters in the Sahara, but, um, yeah, still, if they did, keep in mind, a bit of sand as an irritant can easily become a pearl.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2013-04-03 12:49 PM

Nice...James

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

9 posted 2013-04-03 03:12 PM

LHBob,
yes, I forgot about the pearl. Thank you for reminding me. I need to keep that close to my heart and soul. Bless your heart
lori

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

10 posted 2013-04-03 03:14 PM

Thanks James! Glad to see you are reading and commenting.

lori

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