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paderewski
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0 posted 2013-12-07 11:03 AM

days end so they merge
and they drift in one by one
gathering of crows

©November 10, 2013 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ You can't start the next chapter of your life if you keep re-reading the last one. ~*~

Krawdad
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1 posted 2013-12-07 12:52 PM

Good one, J.
I love crow poems.
I think I've left one or two here somewhere . . .

paderewski
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2 posted 2013-12-07 01:10 PM

Thanks Krawdad, I find them creeping into my poems on a fairly regular beat also.

~*~ You can't start the next chapter of your life if you keep re-reading the last one. ~*~

jwesley
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3 posted 2013-12-07 08:47 PM

Yeah, don't crows/ravens inhabit "us" . . . Poe was so correct. Well done, my friend.

j.

paderewski
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4 posted 2013-12-07 08:50 PM

Poe was absolutely correct, my friend. And he wrote the all-time masterpiece about them.

~*~ If they give you lined paper write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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5 posted 2013-12-10 09:16 AM

I've heard interesting things about crows...They are very clever and smart and excellent thieves... Well worth writing about.

Lori

paderewski
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6 posted 2013-12-10 09:23 AM

Yep. They are mischievous, to say the least. They fascinate me. Thank you for being here Lori.

~*~ If we are what we eat, she's fast, easy and cheap. ~*~

nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2013-12-10 12:46 PM

They are mischievous and quite noisy...

M

paderewski
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8 posted 2013-12-10 12:53 PM

Hah! That they are, M, noisy is the word, In my opinion I think they are smutty crow curse words.

~*~ If we are what we eat, she's fast, easy and cheap. ~*~

Margherita
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9 posted 2013-12-11 06:42 AM

Beautiful scenery you created in this haiku, dear Jerry.

Just yesterday on the road I had a discussion with a crow who didn't move to safety before my car and made me slow down enough to send a "hi" in his direction. He wanted just attention and a friendly smile I guess!

Margherita

Juju
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10 posted 2013-12-11 07:06 AM

I like this haiku

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

paderewski
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11 posted 2013-12-11 07:50 AM

Thank you Juju.

~*~ If we are what we eat, she's fast, easy and cheap. ~*~

paderewski
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12 posted 2013-12-11 07:53 AM

Margherita, that is a scene I can replay in my thoughts for days.

~*~ If we are what we eat, she's fast, easy and cheap. ~*~

JamesMichael
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13 posted 2013-12-16 08:32 PM

enjoyed...James

paderewski
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14 posted 2013-12-16 10:39 PM

Thanks James.

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