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Gale
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0 posted 2013-11-22 04:12 PM




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The world around me has vanished, lost in the night
All things and thoughts seem fallen in some black hole
The wires are ruptured, the sky is flashing with light
Or, maybe, it’s the result of my last default

And since the dark has taken me by surprise
I’ve lit a candle, remained of Christmas Eve
Its gentle flame is dancing before my eyes
Obedient to your whisper, my true belief

I pour out my soul onto the sheet
I write a letter to someone who’s drawn a sword
And looking over my shoulder you try to read
But obviously understand not a single word

I hear you saying again: I should not give up
Oh, can you recall the time when you were betrayed?
I wonder if ever you saw me draining your cup
And bearing that very cross to the top one day

Let poetry be my last escape from the blues
I heard about its healing creative force
The way rough diamonds turn into precious jewels
It facets our feelings and secret thoughts

My pen is running along and filling the page
The flame is dancing, and slowly drop by drop
The melted wax is running over the edge
I guess that trust has nothing to do with hope

It’s really hard to live on and never wait,
To liberate all your fantasies, let’em fly
Resigning to the maxima “come what may”
And write your story across the undying sky

My poetry is the candle your love has lit
It’s not the wax, but verses are dripping down
The wick of life is burning - I’ve got a bit
When everything is written I’ll simply die.

Or, possibly, it will end up with less delay
If someone, who wants to leave to forget my face,
Just slams the door behind and goes away,
And blows out my dream
To another space

You’re not a smoker - there are no matches at hand
To make alive that one decided to break
I know my fate, and truly I don’t pretend
Please shelter my lonely light from a big mistake

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November 2013

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[This message has been edited by Gale (11-23-2013 07:50 PM).]

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Michael
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1 posted 2013-11-22 04:49 PM


Poetry can certainly be cathartic, Galina...  and if the words live, and evoke emotion in the reader the way yours does, the poet never really dies.  Poetry has always been my release for the darker emotions I bear.  I only regret I have had not much other than that to offer it.  I feel the pain in your writing... that is to say I can very much empathise with it.  I do so hope to see a lighter side come through it one day.  

Michael

OwlSA
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2 posted 2013-11-22 04:53 PM


Galina, as a poem, this is a masterpiece of masterpieces.  It is powerful, sensitive, filled with beautiful images, holds the reader with every word and nuance, and of course, there is the beautiful photo at the end.  

As an outpouring of how you are feeling, it has me in tears that you are so terribly sad.  

Let me know if there is something I can do.  I am tempted to email you some uplifting poems of my own, but I am worried that they may make you feel even worse.

Owl

paderewski
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3 posted 2013-11-22 05:01 PM


Giving into poetry's wordplay is one of the best ways to walk through and destroy your heartache. You can absolutely lose yourself and your hurts within the confines of the poem. You have an excellent chance of finding what was stolen from you.

~*~ My fake plants died because I did not pretend to water them. ~*~

2islander2
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4 posted 2013-11-23 02:27 AM


hello gale, this is emotionnal and like an intimate confession that can bring some peace, and reasons to write, o love the sensitivity of the words and the emotionnal impact, superbe,


yann

Gale
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5 posted 2013-11-23 07:59 PM


Thank you, Michael, for reading and your kind words!
You're right, poetry helps to survive hard times and keep sane. At least I think so.

Gale
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6 posted 2013-11-23 08:08 PM


Thank you, Owl!
I've got your letter and already read a half.
You're a sensitive and sympathetic person, and I'm glad that there are such people in the world )

OwlSA
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7 posted 2013-11-23 08:19 PM


Thank you for your kindness.  I hope it made you feel at least a tiny bit better.  Smiles.

Owl

[This message has been edited by OwlSA (11-24-2013 05:00 AM).]

Gale
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8 posted 2013-11-23 08:23 PM


Thank you, Jerry!
I'm too young to have such symptoms ) My heart isn't aching.
Or maybe it starts when you can change something. I can't. I feel deceived but not looted. I'm not sure that I ever was in possesion of anything )

Gale
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9 posted 2013-11-23 08:27 PM


Thank you, Yann!
I appreciate your comment )

Gale
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10 posted 2013-11-23 08:31 PM


Diana, I will reply your letter when I read them all )
jwesley
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11 posted 2013-11-24 05:46 PM


You're never too young to have such symptoms (your comment to Jerry), my friend - it's how you move on from them that counts and I don't believe you'll have any problems there.

This piece was well written and definitely touches both heart and soul.

j.

Gale
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12 posted 2013-11-24 06:10 PM


Thank you, Jwesley )
I just tried to be not too serious. I can write a sad poem, but I can't show the whole world what pains me.
I never felt heartache literally, because I'm only 36 and I've got no CHD or vegetoasthenic syndrome. But of course I know what kind of pain Jerry meant. Sorry, I'm too confused to joke well (((

But I appreciate your comment )

JamesMichael
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13 posted 2013-11-25 09:40 PM


fine, fine writing...James
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