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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2013-10-04 05:32 PM



Fox River


  These Lazy old waters meandering through
  And dreamers like me watching rivers like you
  The tall waving grasses against a blue sky
  Whisper a sigh as our life passes by

My friend, old Fox River, moves on toward the sea
Don't leave here ,Fox River without taking me
Sweet moments, like water, just keep flowing on
  In only a moment, a moment is gone

  By night, you keep travelling, so slowly you glide
  What moon is your lover?  What star is your guide?
  What dream do you carry with you to the sea?
  Perhaps it's the dream of a dreamer like me

My friend, old Fox River, moves on toward the sea
Don't leave here ,Fox River without taking me
Sweet moments, like water, just keep flowing on
  In only a moment, a moment is gone

Elizabeth Santos

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D.Lester Young
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1 posted 2013-10-04 06:19 PM


I glide in your verse that meanders the SEE shore.

[This message has been edited by D.Lester Young (10-04-2013 09:45 PM).]

Gale
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since 2013-06-10
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Russia
2 posted 2013-10-04 10:34 PM


Much enjoyed your poem!
Thanks for sharing!

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
3 posted 2013-10-05 02:03 AM


" Don't leave here ,Fox River without taking me "

I think many of us, especially as we age, are singing that tune - or should I say lament? -
It's scary to think we could be left behind, lost.

j.

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa
4 posted 2013-10-05 04:21 AM


Beautiful as always, Liz.  I love the whole poem, of course, as always, but one interpretation of it frightens me.  So, I think I will go with the other interpretation.  Be well.

Owl

JerryPat2
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5 posted 2013-10-05 07:37 AM


Lovely, in a haunting way.

~*~ I don't have to eat sarcasm to recognize the flavor. ~*~

Margherita
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Eternity
6 posted 2013-10-05 03:25 PM


What dream do you carry with you to the sea?
  Perhaps it's the dream of a dreamer like me


Simply awesome, dear Elizabeth, with its touch of sweet melancholy.

Margherita

JamesMichael
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7 posted 2013-10-14 06:11 PM


Fine writing...reminds me of the feelings of "Moon River"...James  
KerriB
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8 posted 2013-10-15 07:09 PM



Love the waving grasses against a blue sky
the whisper as our life passes by
and that line:

"In only a moment a moment is gone."

Very much enjoyed.
Kerri

ebonygirl
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9 posted 2013-10-15 07:44 PM


This poem sooths the sadness.
Loved every word!
Ms. E

Michael
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10 posted 2013-10-16 04:36 PM


Deep, and quite profound, as is much of what flows forth from your pen these days.  A lovely verse, much enjoyed.

Michael

Goldenrose
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11 posted 2013-10-16 05:36 PM


This rhymes and reads very well a fine poem that could also make a good song lyric too?

Thank you for sharing..

Goldenrose

Peace is not only better than war, but infinitely more arduous - George - Bernard Shaw.

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