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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Warrior Mice The orange and gold of the dark desert floor did fade with the plummet of the Sun -and the red heat ebbed in the twilight -while the blue stars twinkled in the nightlight. -When the brown sand shifted in the moonlight, Two mice did run, run, run thru a deep, deep gully of an upslant hill over sand in the night sublime. -Their hearts beat faster in the lost light -from impending disaster of a fright night -by the claws of an Owl now in midflight as its wings sliced the air from behind. But as Warrior Mice hunting on the hot desert sand and designed for evasive speeds, -they flickered thru shadows of the night time, -criss-crossed the black road's white line, -confused the Owl's sight line bringing food for their young 'uns needs. And the orange and gold of the bright desert floor were the paints of the dawn's display -as the mice peeked once at the daylight -thru the sweltering heat that was airtight -while the sand grew hot in the sunlight and the Owl waited close of the day. Soon, sunset light poured colors into night dimming day into indigo and black -and the sounds and the silences of evening -in the shadows of the forest life teeming -sang a lullaby of lost light sleeping with a dream of the dawn coming back. Then the orange and gold of the dark desert floor disappeared with the plummet of the Sun -and the red heat ebbed in the twilight -while the blue stars twinkled in the nightlight. -When the brown sand shifted in the moonlight, Two mice did run, run, run. Namyh [This message has been edited by Namyh (09-28-2013 08:51 AM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Namyh, this is so well crafted and exquisite that it touched me to the core. I felt at once for the mice and for the owl, both in midst of their life struggles within the breathtaking spectacle of nature. Stunning also when considered as a metaphor for our own lives. You are so very good, Namyh! Margherita |
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ponderthepoetorrsx Member
since 2011-06-25
Posts 284U.S , Ca |
I, i really enjoyed this, there's so much to say about it that i know not where to start |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderfully descriptive Namyh, well done. I could feel myself cheering on the Warrier Mice as they evaded their predator. Much enjoyed.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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