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Odin's Ice Storm
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Odin's Ice Storm |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
 The sky wheeze changed from west prevailing Bringing warm breath it had gathered Up from south...a springlike teasing Of a frozen earth still gripped, By the blue hands cold of winter. Hickory choirs sing abnormal Through twigs bent north, The tune is different. The gray-dressed line of naked singers Held fast against the driving force Of Odin's first-invaders. But on a brisk wind, came fell sailing Ships of Norsemen, pikes at ready Sharpened spears to pierce the wooden Skins of sleeping unawares... Their Limbs, their arms Their finger-branches. But the trees, but swayed Their buds asleep, slumbering On a wrong perceived as normal Winter day they stayed Their ground, and only dreamed Of green-gowns they would wear in summer Imagine: A Viking army bringing battle Fighting-flighting arrows Tipped with porcelain, That stuck and coated, Thick and silver- Blood that clung to branches Building- Bending Popping, Breaking; The conquered could not move From rooted homes Made by their maker, No safe place from viking danger Not a cave, or moated castle. So by sharp of mammen axes, Arms came crashing- Shattering like casted iron Struck by hammers, When they hit The anvil ground. And as the Nordic Storm went passing In the wind, a song of Odin Words were heard The lines of ancient, Crazed berserker songs. [This message has been edited by ice (03-01-2012 02:08 PM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
"Crazed berserker songs." heehee You got that right and the got the title of this blast from the north right also. The minute examination of the frozen tundra and the stay hopeful buds waiting for spring to have sprung, is absolutely great reading and this could go on and become an ode . . . ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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splashMeadow Junior Member
since 2011-06-09
Posts 20UK |
Magnificantly visual and mythical. Love the ending... the way the battle imagery has been brought to life from the sound of the wind blowing through the icy trees and winter scenery. I love poems that take me to places I have never seen before... and make me feel i'm there too. p.s. hope you received the email with the link to the 'garden' blog? |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
If ever I have wanted to sing the song of ice storms and its hoarfrost, it would have been this one... but I didn't and you did and I am envious as ever. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Here: Hickory choirs sing abnormal, Through twigs bent north, The tune is different. A gray-dressed line of naked singers Held fast against the driving force Of Odin's first-invaders, and here: But the trees, but swayed... Their buds asleep, slumbering On a wrong perceived as normal Winter day they stayed Their ground and only dreamed, Of green-gowns they would wear in summer I am captivated by the imagery throughout, but those are my two favorite stanzas. I love the personification of the different characters in your poem; the storm, the unwitting trees and blossoms... it makes me feel like it's a cross between a football game and a ballet. I don't know if I should clap and yell wildly, or sit quiet awe. lol maybe a bit of both, then.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ice...you stir the whim of jagged blade here in this viking heart...muycoolo amigo. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Ford, this blows me away. I read it yesterday, but was too speechless to reply. It has so many of your talents all wrapped into one – some of which are your spell-binding story-telling, your fine-tuned observation, your simultaneous hardy strength and beautiful sensitivity, your magical ability to choose “le mot juste” and your ability to weave all elements of you talents into a snowflake-perfect work of art, which is nevertheless as honest and sincere and delicate yet strong as a tiny brave little snowdrop emerging from the snow. Wow and lots more wows! Owl |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Thanks Jerry Maybe it could be an ode to Odin......:-) I love the old berserker tunes. * Splash I have been able to visualize the mythical since I was a small child. Thank you for the reply. Ummm, I'll check for that e-mail..don't remember it..I'll get back to you. * Sunny Oh Sunny, I love hoarfrost..once I was in the woods and could hear it tinkle against the trees.. But please don't envy me in any way, Im just a country boy that looks closely at what is around me. Thank you for the reply. * Nicole "it makes me feel like it's a cross between a football game and a ballet" Oh, I like that...you see the poem, perhaps as a yin/yang symbol-football/ballet...:-) Thanks for the reply. * Dark "you stir the whim of jagged blade here" I think there is a little viking spirit in all of us, Dark. Thanks for the reply * Diana What a warm, and wonderful reply... In the Norse myths I see you as Gna, because of your love of horses, and ability to deliver messages swiftly in the form of poems. Thanks for the reply. "It is difficult |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
That was not just a poem, that was an event. Lori |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Ford, what a beautiful reply. I am so honoured and happy to be called anything because of my love of horses, and love the additional being able to deliver messages swiftly in the form of poems! What a wonderful mélange! I don't know of Gna, but will look him/her up. Thank you so much for this. Owl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I have just looked up Gná! That would make Flicka my darling horse in Heaven now, Hófvarpnir and WOW! There have been many, many, many wonderful things said about my precious horse, by many who knew him and by many who didn't, but nobody has ever said this about him! Thank you! Oh, my Flicka Hófvarpnir, tossing his heels in glee and I are flying high now through the skies and the smile on my face is in danger of going all the way around my head! Thank you again! Owl |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
When reading your poem, I felt as though I was right in the middle of all the events; an epic novel is your poem, Ice! Fantastic! Ms. E |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Ms. Lori I think you are right, this was an event, a real one... I just added a few notes of metaphor music to sweeten it up a little...lol Thanks for reading. * Ms. Gna What I wrote in the reply to your reply was what the poems mood suggested. The life of a poems theme can be visualized, and expanded with the proper imagination...The world is none other than the Norse, Greek, Celtic, Roman etc. myths say it is, or was, to someone who tries to bring them to life with a pen. Thanks again. * Ms. E Thank you for reading , and the reply. These types of events are repeated daily, everywhere, fueled by some unseen power. I can't tell for sure what energy is involved with the playing out of these events. But they inspire me, by their mystery...and so I blame them on the Gods....:-) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Found a poem for you...  |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
You transported me right into the heart of that, iceman~*~*~ niiice~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Nice one Mr ice!! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
A powerful write! Enjoyed! Kat >^..^< |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Bel1e Jl Kat Thank you for reading, and the replies.. Very much appreciated.......:-)
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