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Open Poetry #48

Somehow This Sorrow

poetically ghetto
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since 2004-01-20

Posts 100

0 posted 2013-09-16 03:04 AM

Herewith this sorrow
I hope to exclude
Straight from a heart
that was forced to conclude
That love is a business
that love is a tool
A tool to be used
to carve, dig
and remove.

Therewith this sorrow
I hope to emerge
Straight from my marrow
that was forced to concur
That lust is a purchase
that lust is a game
A game to be used
to shake, shook
and restrain.

Wherewith this sorrow
I hope to ensure
Straight from the core
that was forced to insure
That life is a joke
that life is a gag
A gag to be used
to bind, strap
and rehash.

eric Martinez
2013

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2013-09-16 05:46 AM

Okay, Eric, you have given us a primer on what is and what isn't about the emotions our hearts play in the arena of romance. You are a good poet.

~*~ If they give you lined paper write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2013-09-16 06:39 AM

Eric, lot of pain here... I like your perspective and format. Thought provoking.

Lori

poetically ghetto
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since 2004-01-20

Posts 100

3 posted 2013-09-17 07:06 PM

thanx jerry for the kind comments been a long time since ive been called a poet thanx lori I have a tough problem writing poetry in one way I have always written using different formats and themes

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2013-09-18 10:22 AM

Eric, I have come back to read this several times and really like it. I, too, like the flow and I think the construction is interesting. Like this one a lot!

Alison

poetically ghetto
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since 2004-01-20

Posts 100

5 posted 2013-09-18 12:25 PM

Alison you have made my day I am humbled and I hope to continue inspiring all who cross my path

ken206573
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since 2008-10-14

Posts 487

6 posted 2013-09-18 05:11 PM

Wow! This is amazing, I like the flow and it's bittersweet rhythm, very deep.

poetically ghetto
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since 2004-01-20

Posts 100

7 posted 2013-09-20 02:30 AM

hey thanx ken if you like rhymes I gots rhymes this was fun to put together

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