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poetically ghetto
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since 2004-01-20

Posts 100

0 posted 2013-09-10 04:39 AM

She lies in mourn
Clad in war worn attire,
Feeling quite spent
From a world set afire.

The earth splits open
Revealing its rage
As the skies embark
On their own escapades.

Battered and bruised
Pilfered and used
All natural order has been misconstrued.

Her children are slaughtered and hung out to dry
Then pasted on walls
Exposed to all eyes.

Her breath is thus poisoned
By fumes we create
In a bid to move faster
In a bid to lay waste
Which flow desiccating the oceans and lakes.

oh!! How she does suffer
This blood that we taint
Oh!! How she wonders
What more can she take.

eric Martinez
2013

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2013-09-10 06:38 AM

The centuries old story. Men go to war, mothers lose their sons. One would think, after all this time, man would have learned.

~*~ If they give you lined paper write sideways. ~*~

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

2 posted 2013-09-10 12:24 PM

Good poetry always elicits emotion/reaction from its readers. Great poetry has the power to draw the same emotion from viewers who see the poem from completely different vantage points. I saw vividly our wounded Mother Earth in this piece, and the pain we've cause her. Excellent write.

Michael

poetically ghetto
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since 2004-01-20

Posts 100

3 posted 2013-09-11 02:33 AM

thanks for the kind words guys and Michael your were right in mentioning mother nature

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2013-09-13 11:28 PM

Oops, my bad, missed this one eric. Nice one you have here. Obviously great personification. Appreciate your point of view.

Lori

poetically ghetto
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since 2004-01-20

Posts 100

5 posted 2013-09-15 02:47 AM

thank you lori for looking in I respect your thoughts and your craft

EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

6 posted 2013-09-15 10:00 AM

What more can she take?
What more can her children take?
I do wonder along with you. The warning
signs are all around, yet many are just
blind to them.
I am receptive of your good thoughts and wish more would look in here and take a look around

poetically ghetto
Member

since 2004-01-20

Posts 100

7 posted 2013-09-16 01:40 AM

thanx emmarose you were perceptive and very kind with your remarks

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