Open Poetry #48 |
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Tree of Life - One less branch |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
It was the end of winter where a small part of her sweater began to fall off her slight shoulders She stared onto the banks of snow her backyard, the oasis The small part of her heart that used to laugh with that little boy the brown, curled haired boy that touched her cheek every morning kissed her forehead and never lost her in his eyes for she was his only sister Every December where the lake, Frozen hibernating stationed just east of the skies foggy stare his small hands began to disappear and curls begin to drift away before the water had turned him blue just like the river of tears streaming down her cheek. Always apart of her soul her heart that never shying away from brinks of sadness little brothers hands December always reaching back. |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
I enjoyed both the somber and sweetness in the poem's mood here, a bit cryptic for me, but nevertheless I enjoyed |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Aww yes, the chill stings long after winter freezes over. Your last line is very beautiful, sadly. ~Tomer~ Love reading ya~ |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
This leaves me with such sadness, which is a good thing cause thats what poetry does - makes the reader feel one way or the other. Thank you for sharing. -Trina |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
Emma- Happy it resonated. Every word is open to meaning.. Cheers Tomer |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
Blues- Thanks for the kind words...happy you enjoyed it, especially the last line. Cheers Tomer |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
Sinfully, Happy it touched you. At times, life is more wise when sadness and heartache is involved. Cheers Tomer |
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